There is on inreasing amount of advertiaing directed at children which encouages them to buy goods such as toys and snacks.Many parrents are worried that these adverterisemens put too much pressure on children,while some advertisers claim that they provide useful information to children .Discuss both view ad give your opinion
Advertisements are all around us, especially advertising targeting children, who are considered vulnerable
targets by companies. As a result, many parents are worried that their children are being wrongly
influenced by ads. However, some advertisers claim that they provide beneficial information to children. ln
the following paragraphs I intend to discuss both perspectives.
It is not difficult to see why parents'worry is justified. Children, under a certain age, lack abilities to make
wise iudgments as to what they really want. They are attracted by colourful pictures on advertisement, and
swayed by misleading information. So, they pester their parents to buy those things, and this can upset the
budget of many families. Even the advertisements of fast foods are bad for children. Children cannot
understand that the slim-trim models advertising Mac Donalds burgers hardly ever eat such foods
themselves. They are attracted to fast foods and these are very detrimental for their health.
What is more, some ads show some stunts, and although it is written that children should not copy these
stunts, children hardly ever read that part and in their ignorance try to perform those stunts and get hurt.
For example, in my neighbourhood, one child tried to jump from one rooftop to the other after seeing the
ad of Thumbs Up and ended up with a plaster on his leg. Therefore, parents are rightly worried.
on the other hand, advertisements also provide beneficial information to the children. For example, the
advert of colSate toothpaste, which tells that we should brush our teeth twice daily, is good for children.
Then there are ads about health drinks such as Complan and Bournvita, which are good for children.
Furthermore, advertisements also touch important issues, such as ads against wastage of water, ads for
tree plantation, ads against wastage of electricity and ads for keeping the surroundings clean. Children are
motivated by these ads and try to follow the good things they learn.
To conclude, it is true that some adverts have a detrimental effect on children and should have some
regulations, but at the same time this fact can also be not be denied that adverts enlighten children in
many ways by providing a lot of useful information.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, really, so, then, therefore, as to, for example, such as, as a result, it is true, what is more, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 13.1623246493 160% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 24.0651302605 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1936.0 1615.20841683 120% => OK
No of words: 367.0 315.596192385 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.27520435967 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37689890912 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92883212209 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 176.041082164 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.553133514986 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 567.0 506.74238477 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.7385604487 49.4020404114 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.8 106.682146367 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.35 20.7667163134 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.55 7.06120827912 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 23.0 4.38176352705 525% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.282483679742 0.244688304435 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0907600866737 0.084324248473 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0684531127747 0.0667982634062 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.08395146058 0.151304729494 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.054960165706 0.056905535591 97% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 13.0946893788 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.34 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.93 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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