TOPIC 6:More and more wild animals are on the verge of extinction and others are on the endangered list. What are the cause of this? How can this problem be solved?

Essay topics:

TOPIC 6:More and more wild animals are on the verge of extinction and others are on the endangered list. What are the cause of this? How can this problem be solved?

My essay

Although wild animals play a crucial role in preserving nation’s natural environment, the number of extinct and endangered ones has considerably increased. From my point of view, to put a stop to over hunting and deforestation,stricter control and raising people’s awareness are desirable.

Firstly, due to overpopulation and modernizing process, a large scale of forests has been cut down to meet people’s need of food, land and materials. As a result of being deprived of their natural environment and source of feed, many wild animals cannot adapt to this change and eventually die out. Secondly, the decrease in total animals can be attributed to the government’s loose law. Consequently, poachers are taking advantage of this to hunt rare animals at an alarming rate for their financial purpose.

It is important that action is taken to combat this problem. The government must make sure that adequate legislation and controls are in place to prevent poachers from continuing exploit wildlife. Besides, building up more national parks is advisable to provide animals with suitable habitat, thus these species will have more time to adapt to the climate change. Also, the society has a role to play in protecting animals. The whole community should refuse to use products made of wild animals and organize aid to save endangered ones.

To conclude, owing to wilderness’s important contribution to environment, steps need be taken to protect animals from gradually disappeared. Not only should the government bring in stricter laws and develop national parks, but people need to raise their voice and reject products made from related to animals as well.

Votes
Average: 10 (2 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 232, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , stricter
...a stop to over hunting and deforestation,stricter control and raising people's aware...
^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, consequently, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, thus, well, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 12.0 24.0651302605 50% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1441.0 1615.20841683 89% => OK
No of words: 266.0 315.596192385 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.41729323308 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03850299372 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.20624681765 2.80592935109 114% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 176.041082164 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.635338345865 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 452.7 506.74238477 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.3091990179 49.4020404114 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.846153846 106.682146367 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4615384615 20.7667163134 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.61538461538 7.06120827912 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.207623781552 0.244688304435 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0680442740247 0.084324248473 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0551870251464 0.0667982634062 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.11418030066 0.151304729494 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0515923933325 0.056905535591 91% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 13.0946893788 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 50.2224549098 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.16 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.32 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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