TOPIC: An increasing number of professionals, such as doctors and teachers, are leaving their own poorer countries to work in developed countries. What problems does this cause? What solutions can you suggest to deal with situation?
Many undeveloped countries throughout the world are facing the burning issue on brain drain. White collars have tendency to move to developed countries in the hope of better employment prospect. This essay will discuss several causes and suggest some solutions to tackle this problem.
There are different reasons to explain this issue. The first and foremost is lack of vocational opportunity. The increasing number of students with educational qualifications places strain on overcrowding job market in poor countries, which makes job-searching much more difficult than ever before Another contributing factor fostering this trend is salary. Although engineering or teaching is regarded as well-paid careers, the income is seemingly unable to meet their expectation based on their dedication and effort. Finally, working background also plays a role in intellectual people’s choice. Unprofessional and restricting environment poses handicaps to promote employees’ ability optimally, which results in disappointment. For these reasons, intelligentsias make up their mind to leave their native land.
Followed these above causes, measures to attract talents are presented as below. To begin with, the labor market needs to be expanded for the purpose of creating opportunities for unemployed people. Furthermore, in addition to appropriate level of salary, extra pay or job promotion is also an eligible method to keep worker on their toes. Last but not least, it is also important to construct a professional working environment which gave the talented and skillful employees the chances to develop their maximum capability.
In conclusion, it is clear that there are obvious reasons for brain capital flight in developing countries. However, I take the view that if steps are implemented efficiently, we are absolutely able to take a positive look on a brighter future.
Comments
Hey :D Your essay is well…
Hey :D
Your essay is well-written, detailed, organized, and your choice of words is excellent. However, I'm a bit confused about what you wanted to discuss for the first question, which is provided by the topic. To be more specific, the topic never mentioned discussing potential causes (reasons that kickstarted the trend), but it requires elaborating on long-term problems. In your second paragraph, you seemed to take into account factors regarding "reasons", instead of "problems". If I'm not wrong, this is an academic mistake and can be judged heavily against the final score of your essay.
However, I would never consider myself a "know-it-all", so if you could realize what you did, then that is great :). If I'm mistaken or misunderstood, you can always correct me. Anyway, I hope you an amazing day :D.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, furthermore, however, if, look, so, well, in addition, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 7.85571142285 13% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1607.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 282.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.69858156028 5.12529762239 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09790868904 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.17291085783 2.80592935109 113% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.698581560284 0.561755894193 124% => OK
syllable_count: 497.7 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 49.0827983488 49.4020404114 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.4375 106.682146367 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.625 20.7667163134 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.875 7.06120827912 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.18225086169 0.244688304435 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0470930039361 0.084324248473 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0441401331021 0.0667982634062 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0955656651048 0.151304729494 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.04521412833 0.056905535591 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.3 50.2224549098 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.48 12.4159519038 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.53 8.58950901804 123% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 78.4519038076 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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