The use of social media, such as Facebook and Twitter, is replacing face-to- face contact in this century. Do you think the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?
It is clear that there are numerous benefits that generated by the utilizing of social networks, such as Facebook and Twitter. While this correspondence is more likely to alter face-to-face reaction among human, I strongly argue that these are outweighed by the advantages.
On the one hand, there are two major drawbacks that are considered as consequences of the use of social media. Firstly, there are no any measures that ensure real identification of stranger individuals who attempt to contact with others via social networking sites due to advances in technology such as photoshop or filter application. For example, most of youngsters are likely to find lovers by using dating apps on mobile phones despite the high level of risks such as fraud or sexual harassment. Secondly, sonic waves that radiate from electronic devices that allow people to be on the internet is one of reasons that causes mental disorders. To be specific, studies have shown that those psychological disorders lead to phenomena tend to decline the demand of face-to-face communication of those who usually spend as much as time on Facebook.
On the other hand, I firmly believe that there are more beneficial impacts of the social media on modern life rather than disadvantages. Firstly, social network is the most convenient and state-of-the-art technological breakthrough to access to global habitat. For example, billions of individuals are able to contact and make friend with others who is from all over the world with appropriate cost. Besides, those who are considering to arrange a real meeting with a new friend whom they have just known via the Internet could take a pre-check by searching information about the person on one’s profile and habits that usually are updated continually on one’s Facebook.
In conclusion, although using the social media causes the decline of face-to-face communication, I argue that the benefits that the social networking sites created outweigh the drawbacks of that.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 131, Rule ID: NOW[2]
Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: now
...use of social media. Firstly, there are no any measures that ensure real identific...
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Line 3, column 350, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the youngsters') or simply say ''most youngsters''.
Suggestion: most of the youngsters; most youngsters
...hop or filter application. For example, most of youngsters are likely to find lovers by using dati...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, while, for example, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 7.85571142285 13% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 19.0 7.30460921844 260% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 41.998997996 129% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1688.0 1615.20841683 105% => OK
No of words: 319.0 315.596192385 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.29153605016 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22617688928 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99395196869 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.561128526646 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 535.5 506.74238477 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 46.630566394 49.4020404114 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.666666667 106.682146367 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.5833333333 20.7667163134 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.33333333333 7.06120827912 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.263374374117 0.244688304435 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0910548064692 0.084324248473 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0761764445707 0.0667982634062 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.186632493863 0.151304729494 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0880722802925 0.056905535591 155% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.8 13.0946893788 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 50.2224549098 73% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.3001002004 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.7 12.4159519038 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.83 8.58950901804 114% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 78.4519038076 126% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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