Violence in the media promote violence in the society.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Violence showed in the media may lead to the violence in community. From my point of view, this cannot be true because of the psychological and physical conditions of those who watch the media oftentimes prevent them from doing this act.
Psychologically, persons who watch the media often consider that it is not correct to do violence or any other forms of crime. For instance, if a man watched a scene of violence in the news, this does not mean that he would do it. Besides, the man might have a well-paid job and family for whom he is living. Hence, it is not necessary for him to do a violent act. Additionally, a large number of citizens are aware of the violence on the screen and they can distinguish between right and wrong.
Physical conditions of those who were witnesses of violence in the media are also essential. Since men are more capable of doing violence than women because of their muscle strength and endurance to persist someone’s invasion, the men could have better opportunities to accomplish violence. In other words, some might have done it because of their capabilities to violate someone. Their physical strength allows them to punish or violate someone, whether he or she is a man or a woman.
Physical and psychological significant aspects could prevent those who watch the screen from violence in communities. In addition to these aspects, persons who watched this act in the media could warn unaware others that violence in the media is a part of society.
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'besides', 'hence', 'if', 'may', 'so', 'well', 'for instance', 'in addition', 'in other words']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.237762237762 0.247107183377 96% => OK
Verbs: 0.13986013986 0.155533422707 90% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0699300699301 0.0946595960268 74% => OK
Adverbs: 0.027972027972 0.0501214627716 56% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0559440559441 0.0437548338989 128% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.13986013986 0.122226691241 114% => OK
Participles: 0.013986013986 0.0403226058552 35% => Some participles wanted.
Conjunctions: 2.78788275746 2.80594681477 99% => OK
Infinitives: 0.027972027972 0.0326793684256 86% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00163938923432 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.111888111888 0.0861772015684 130% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.034965034965 0.021408717616 163% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0244755244755 0.011925033212 205% => Maybe 'Which' is overused. If other WH_determiners like 'Who, What, Whom, Whose...' are used too in sentences, then there are no issues.
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1520.0 1933.35771543 79% => OK
No of words: 257.0 316.048096192 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.91439688716 6.12580529183 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.00390054096 4.20517956788 95% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.31906614786 0.374742101984 85% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.256809338521 0.28420135186 90% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.178988326848 0.203846283523 88% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0894941634241 0.137316102897 65% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78788275746 2.80594681477 99% => OK
Unique words: 131.0 176.037074148 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.509727626459 0.56093040696 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 48.4155931851 60.7387585426 80% => OK
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0891783567 81% => OK
Sentence length: 19.7692307692 20.7743622355 95% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.6442762458 49.517814964 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.923076923 127.492653851 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7692307692 20.7743622355 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.769230769231 0.814263465372 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38877755511 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 3.99599198397 125% => OK
Readability: 45.4501646214 49.1944974215 92% => OK
Elegance: 1.75 1.69124875643 103% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.404453023786 0.332605444948 122% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.140336212094 0.102741220458 137% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0702758439818 0.0668466124924 105% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.568482971989 0.534860350844 106% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.135735767134 0.148594505496 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.191079404074 0.134430193775 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.132240943156 0.0742795772207 178% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.305646715415 0.324371583561 94% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0253596560355 0.0638462369009 40% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.306926314739 0.228012699653 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0550327686839 0.058150111329 95% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.68436873747 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.9879759519 276% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.41683366733 29% => OK
Positive topic words: 1.0 5.90881763527 17% => More positive topic words wanted.
Negative topic words: 6.0 2.5751503006 233% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 1.9629258517 51% => OK
Total topic words: 8.0 10.4468937876 77% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.