Violence portrayed on TV and in the movies leads to an increase in crime in our society. People who watch violent movies are more likely to become criminals. Do you agree or disagree?
Since the time the television was invented in the 1940’s, it has been the foremost form of entertainment for the young and the old alike. The amount of information and entertainment available on TV was unparalleled till date. The television has always been a part of a families entertainment time.
The with the advancements in technology and easy access to low-cost equipment, there is far more variety of programmes available, from drama to comedy, from sports to adventure, and from food to fighting. Among other things, there is loads of violence and sex programmes and films available to watch at all times. As television is watched by people of all ages, including children and the access to all this content, television is a dangerous place. The children are too innocent to decipher between the right and the wrong. They easily get influenced by the violence shown on TV.
The way a villain’s lives is depicted as adventurous, attractive and full of fun, kids get influenced by the way the fictional character walk, talk and interact with others in film’s and programmes. The kids see the act of smoking, consuming alcohol, and tottering guns and fighting, as a way of life. Long exposure of such content to a child leads to the imitation of such behaviour. To add to all this is the little time parents spend with children due to long work hours. This lack of attention from parents and no one to correct their behaviour at an early stage leads to a negative prejudice mind.
To conclude the topic, I would like to suggest that it is mandatory that the government should bring law’s that deal with restriction of content. Also, set parameters to regulate the quality of content that is allowed on television. The unrestricted content has made adults and young once take up crime and lead to an overall depletion of the society.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'families'' or 'family's'?
Suggestion: families'; family's
... television has always been a part of a families entertainment time. The with the adv...
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Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...rt of a families entertainment time. The with the advancements in technology and...
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Message: Did you mean 'there are loads'?
Suggestion: there are loads
...m food to fighting. Among other things, there is loads of violence and sex programmes and film...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'if', 'so', 'by the way']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.278735632184 0.247107183377 113% => OK
Verbs: 0.137931034483 0.155533422707 89% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0862068965517 0.0946595960268 91% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0172413793103 0.0501214627716 34% => Some adverbs wanted.
Pronouns: 0.014367816092 0.0437548338989 33% => OK
Prepositions: 0.123563218391 0.122226691241 101% => OK
Participles: 0.0402298850575 0.0403226058552 100% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.82885904892 2.80594681477 101% => OK
Infinitives: 0.051724137931 0.0326793684256 158% => OK
Particles: 0.00574712643678 0.00163938923432 351% => Less particles wanted.
Determiners: 0.126436781609 0.0861772015684 147% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.00574712643678 0.021408717616 27% => Some modal verbs wanted.
WH_determiners: 0.00287356321839 0.011925033212 24% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1850.0 1933.35771543 96% => OK
No of words: 316.0 316.048096192 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.85443037975 6.12580529183 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21620550194 4.20517956788 100% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.319620253165 0.374742101984 85% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.26582278481 0.28420135186 94% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.215189873418 0.203846283523 106% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.142405063291 0.137316102897 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82885904892 2.80594681477 101% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 176.037074148 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.560126582278 0.56093040696 100% => OK
Word variations: 59.9902407716 60.7387585426 99% => OK
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0891783567 99% => OK
Sentence length: 19.75 20.7743622355 95% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.1720805154 49.517814964 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.625 127.492653851 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.75 20.7743622355 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.25 0.814263465372 31% => More Discourse Markers wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38877755511 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 3.99599198397 75% => OK
Readability: 46.332278481 49.1944974215 94% => OK
Elegance: 2.61016949153 1.69124875643 154% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.262941597748 0.332605444948 79% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.145300475798 0.102741220458 141% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0765680088847 0.0668466124924 115% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.582396721395 0.534860350844 109% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.129780452234 0.148594505496 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.114600036787 0.134430193775 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0411900767438 0.0742795772207 55% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.432097315148 0.324371583561 133% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0932268090127 0.0638462369009 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.184326018975 0.228012699653 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0442572448715 0.058150111329 76% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.68436873747 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.41683366733 88% => OK
Positive topic words: 5.0 5.90881763527 85% => OK
Negative topic words: 6.0 2.5751503006 233% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 1.9629258517 51% => OK
Total topic words: 12.0 10.4468937876 115% => OK
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9