When choosing a job, the salary is the most important consideration. What extent do you agree or disagree?
Many people choose their jobs that rely on the size of salary offered. Personally, I totally disagree with this idea that the money is the key consideration when deciding on a career. I believe that the other factors are equally important.
On the one hand, I agree that the importance of money to a modern life of people. Money allows us to meet their basic needs. For example, we need money to pay for housing, food, bills, health care and education, all of which are to improve the quality of their life. If people chose their jobs based one enjoyment or non-financial factors, they find it difficult to support themselves. For example, artists and musicians are known for choosing a career that they love but they are not enough money to live comfortably and raise a family.
Nevertheless, I believe that other considerations are as important as what we earn in our jobs. Firstly, personal relationships and atmosphere in a workshop are extremely special reasons when choosing a job. Competition between rivals may boost our motivation to work hard and achieve the result effectively. Secondly, many people's feelings of job satisfaction come from their professional achievements, the skills they learn, the position they reach rather than the money they earn. Finally, some people choose career because they want to help others and contribute positive effort to society. Some people around the world have established organizations with aims to helps others who have to confront to difficult challenges in their life although they do not receive much money even if they have to invest significant money for these organization.
In conclusion, while salaries certainly control people's choice, I do not believe that money outweighs all motivators.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 669, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'help'.
Suggestion: help
... established organizations with aims to helps others who have to confront to difficul...
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Line 5, column 831, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this organization' or 'these organizations'?
Suggestion: this organization; these organizations
...ey have to invest significant money for these organization. In conclusion, while salaries certa...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, firstly, if, may, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, while, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 24.0651302605 150% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1475.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 285.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.17543859649 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10876417139 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85525224349 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.60350877193 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 461.7 506.74238477 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.0463784904 49.4020404114 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.3333333333 106.682146367 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0 20.7667163134 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.2 7.06120827912 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.147084520971 0.244688304435 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0563717996891 0.084324248473 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0526946701197 0.0667982634062 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100875447885 0.151304729494 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.037425605164 0.056905535591 66% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 13.0946893788 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.76 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.9 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 78.4519038076 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.