When a country develops its technology, the traditional skills and way of life die out it is pointless to keep them alive.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge.
Some people contend that it is pointless to keep traditional skills when a country develops its technology. However, others oppose such contention.
To begin with, we cannot deny that when a country develops its technology, traditional skills die out. However, such traditional skills should be kept because they are a source of education. They provide an insight to the next generations on how something developed over time. For instance, hunting is no longer done through bows and arrows but through a gun. Therefore keeping this traditional hunting equipment would provide knowledge to next generations how their ancestors used to hunt before gun invention. Moreover, it will enlighten people on how a gun came up.
Furthermore, cultural awareness is promoted. Most people who are not aware of norms, values and heritages of some cultures would be enlightened of such. For example preserving the traditional attire of the Zulu people as a result of the new fashion designs. Different people from other races and countries becomes knowledgeable of the original Zulu clothing. Following that, they learn to appreciate the Zulus and their history. This elucidates why it is not pointless to keep traditional ways of life.
In contrary, it is not worth keeping traditional ways of life because it will account for much money. To preserve traditional ways, museums and other exhibits places should be in place. Such places require professionals as well as structures to set them up. As a result, money which could have been used to fur then technology is wasted on such facilities. It is therefore not worth keeping such ways. Moreover, museums do not generate income. They are just places of exhibition yet they have to be maintained with money.
In conclusion, whether traditional ways of life should be kept when a country develops its technology has triggered a spirited debate. However, I assert for traditional ways to be kept despite their costs.
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'furthermore', 'however', 'if', 'moreover', 'so', 'then', 'therefore', 'well', 'for example', 'for instance', 'in conclusion', 'as a result', 'as well as', 'to begin with']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.225352112676 0.247107183377 91% => OK
Verbs: 0.180281690141 0.155533422707 116% => OK
Adjectives: 0.101408450704 0.0946595960268 107% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0591549295775 0.0501214627716 118% => OK
Pronouns: 0.056338028169 0.0437548338989 129% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.107042253521 0.122226691241 88% => OK
Participles: 0.0478873239437 0.0403226058552 119% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.86038140215 2.80594681477 102% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0338028169014 0.0326793684256 103% => OK
Particles: 0.0056338028169 0.00163938923432 344% => OK
Determiners: 0.056338028169 0.0861772015684 65% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0253521126761 0.021408717616 118% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0253521126761 0.011925033212 213% => Maybe 'Which' is overused. If other WH_determiners like 'Who, What, Whom, Whose...' are used too in sentences, then there are no issues.
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1967.0 1933.35771543 102% => OK
No of words: 316.0 316.048096192 100% => OK
Chars per words: 6.2246835443 6.12580529183 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21620550194 4.20517956788 100% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.401898734177 0.374742101984 107% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.303797468354 0.28420135186 107% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.215189873418 0.203846283523 106% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.167721518987 0.137316102897 122% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86038140215 2.80594681477 102% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 176.037074148 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.544303797468 0.56093040696 97% => OK
Word variations: 57.295279616 60.7387585426 94% => OK
How many sentences: 23.0 16.0891783567 143% => OK
Sentence length: 13.7391304348 20.7743622355 66% => OK
Sentence length SD: 27.9476285808 49.517814964 56% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.5217391304 127.492653851 67% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.7391304348 20.7743622355 66% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.652173913043 0.814263465372 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38877755511 114% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 3.99599198397 50% => OK
Readability: 44.1188772702 49.1944974215 90% => OK
Elegance: 1.28571428571 1.69124875643 76% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.310768098504 0.332605444948 93% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0962867659046 0.102741220458 94% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0894645200052 0.0668466124924 134% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.439698104488 0.534860350844 82% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.155508133978 0.148594505496 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0985982596363 0.134430193775 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0718607406101 0.0742795772207 97% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.231264340851 0.324371583561 71% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0249888152395 0.0638462369009 39% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.199089038394 0.228012699653 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0371172721446 0.058150111329 64% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.68436873747 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 3.41683366733 263% => Less neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 7.0 5.90881763527 118% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 2.5751503006 155% => OK
Neutral topic words: 6.0 1.9629258517 306% => OK
Total topic words: 17.0 10.4468937876 163% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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