Whether to be satisfied with the poor conditions in life or attempt to better it has long been the matter of debate. Although some people think that accepting what the life give them is the safe choice, I do advocate the perspective that they should strive to make changes and master their fate.
On the one hand, some people are satisfied with what they have even though it is not what they want. Those justify their viewpoints that making changes is risky and the long-term process that requires massive effort and perseverance. Therefore, if they can bear those bad conditions, they will continue to live with those which is the secure selection and guarantees that they can bring home the bacon. For example, the workers are unsatisfied with their working environment now and they want to move to other company; however, no one can assure that they can find the better job after they leave their former firm. That might be one of the obstacles that hinder people from ameliorating their lives.
On the other hand, if there is no revolution in the mindset, the human civilization will stop developing, consequently, the humankind will soon become obsolete. If people are scared of taking risks and easily giving up, who will evolve the new era for the modern world we are living in? If inventors, for instance, were undetermined and do not have a thirst for revolutionizing the industry, how can the light bulbs, Internet, laptops, smartphones come to the life. And who will become the self-made billionaire if they easily accept the unhappy thing the life bring them? Thus, I myself concur that it is much better to put effort into improving the living, even though it can be the failure, at least we will not repeat the same mistakes one more time in the future.
To conclude with, in some dilemma cases, it is safer to compromise with the poor condition but it would not be the bad choice if we challenges ourselves to take action to advance our lives towards the state and enrich our real-life experience. Hence, I strongly appreciate who are brave to break their mould, overcome the fear of risks to change their destiny and live their life to the fullest.
Whether to be satisfied with the poor conditions in life or attempt to better it has long been the matter of debate. Although some people think that accepting what the life give them is the safe choice, I do advocate the perspective that they should strive to make changes and master their fate.
On the one hand, some people are satisfied with what they have even though it is not what they want. Those justify their viewpoints that making changes is risky and the long-term process that requires massive effort and perseverance. Therefore, if they can bear those bad conditions, they will continue to live with those which is the secure selection and guarantees that they can earn for their living. For example, the workers are unsatisfied with their working environment now and they want to move to other company; however, no one can assure that they can find the better job after they leave their former firm. That might be one of the obstacles that hinder people from ameliorating their lives.
On the other hand, if there is no revolution in the mindset, the human civilization will stop developing, consequently, the humankind will soon become obsolete. If people are scared of taking risks and easily giving up, who will evolve the new era for the modern world we are living in? If inventors, for instance, were undetermined and do not have a thirst for revolutionizing the industry, how can the light bulbs, Internet, laptops, smartphones come to the life. And who will become the self-made billionaire if they easily accept the unhappy thing the life bring them? Thus, I think every effort put into improving the living deserves to be commended.
To conclude with, in some dilemma cases, it is safer to compromise with the poor condition but it would not be the bad choice if we challenged ourselves to take action to advance our lives towards the state and enrich our real-life experience. Hence, I strongly appreciate who are brave to break their mould, overcome the fear of risks to change their destiny and live their life to the fullest.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, hence, however, if, so, therefore, thus, for example, for instance, i think, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 24.0651302605 183% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1704.0 1615.20841683 105% => OK
No of words: 352.0 315.596192385 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.84090909091 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33147354134 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5489968757 2.80592935109 91% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 176.041082164 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.556818181818 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 531.9 506.74238477 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 46.0988290612 49.4020404114 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.714285714 106.682146367 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.1428571429 20.7667163134 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.07142857143 7.06120827912 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.394303725595 0.244688304435 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.138051602068 0.084324248473 164% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.154160234959 0.0667982634062 231% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.298206673645 0.151304729494 197% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.277113739056 0.056905535591 487% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 13.0946893788 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 50.2224549098 109% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.09 12.4159519038 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.55 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 78.4519038076 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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