whether or not someone achieves their aim is mostly by a question of luck. To what extent do you agree or disagree
Most of people have their aim to achieve. While some people argue that they have to be lucky to achieve their aims, I completely disagree.
First of all, I am against the idea that lucky can bring success for two main reasons. Firstly, only people work hard might achieve their success because they spend a lot of money, effort or even time for their acquisitions. Luck cannot bring success in a long-term without the hard-work. A clear example of this is Steve Job, the director of Apple, had spent his whole life to make Apple a huge success. In addition, Nick Vuijic, though his disabilities, studied hard to gain his degree to prove that an unlucky people like him can achieve the success by his belief and energy. Now, he travel around the world to inspire the other by his example
Another reason why I disagree with the success which was achieved by the need of luck is that their success is not depend on luck because it obviously relies on the efforts which they made for it. The fact that students who hope to be lucky in their exams and do not study anymore will probably fail. Although people may be lucky occasionally, but if they rely on luck through their life they will almost certainly be disappointed.
In conclusion, the success in their life depend on the efforts they made for their aim and the luck cannot bring it for them all their life. Therefore, I strongly disagree that people can achieves their aim by a need of luck.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'Most of', you should use 'the' ('Most of the people') or simply say ''Most people''.
Suggestion: Most of the people; Most people
Most of people have their aim to achieve. While some p...
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Line 3, column 116, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'depended'.
Suggestion: depended
...ed of luck is that their success is not depend on luck because it obviously relies on ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, may, so, therefore, while, in addition, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 24.0651302605 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1189.0 1615.20841683 74% => OK
No of words: 261.0 315.596192385 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.55555555556 5.12529762239 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0193898071 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.31186609212 2.80592935109 82% => OK
Unique words: 142.0 176.041082164 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.544061302682 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 361.8 506.74238477 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.8651029017 49.4020404114 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.0833333333 106.682146367 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.75 20.7667163134 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.66666666667 7.06120827912 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.200850466893 0.244688304435 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0943050066242 0.084324248473 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0779256430063 0.0667982634062 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.153606044893 0.151304729494 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0668721404279 0.056905535591 118% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 13.0946893788 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 50.2224549098 134% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.17 12.4159519038 74% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.4 8.58950901804 86% => OK
difficult_words: 45.0 78.4519038076 57% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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