As the world becomes technologically advanced, computer are replacing more and more job. Describe some job positions that may be lost because of computers and discuss at least one problem that may result.

Human always want to find the easiest way to do their works. They have invented a computer which can calculate mathematics formula, whereas if it is done by human, it will take much time. On that day, computer was good news for many people in the world. Unfortunately, nowadays, computers are just good for companies because computers are not only reduce their works but also reduce their workers. Automatically, the companies can cut production cost. On the other side, many workers afraid that they will lose their jobs, some people already have become unemployment.

In the development countries, computers do not take over many jobs, but they will do it slowly and surely. A number of jobs may be lost as effect of computerized technology. Packaging process in many companies has been done by computerized machine. People prefer to send an e-mail than a letter, so proffesion as postman will be reduced. Automated bank machines will substitute workers as bank tellers. It will be worse when number of unemployement increases and the number of population too.

Nowadays, computers cannot yet take over all of human’s jobs. Computers still have many of limitations. Computers cannot yet handle some unique requests. Automated bank machine will also swallow someone’s card just because they forget Personal Identification Number of card or just because of entering incorrect PIN for a couple times. E-mail cannot be sent with a tangible flower attachement. In this part, we still need a helping hand from human.

In this time, human are competing with computers. Computers are getting more advance to replace human being, whereas human are getting smarter to do what computers cannot. If computers can evolve to be better, I believe that human can also upgrade their skill, so human will always survive.

Votes
Average: 6.1 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 178, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
...as if it is done by human, it will take much times. On that day, computer was a good...
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Line 1, column 216, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'good news'.
Suggestion: good news
...e much times. On that day, computer was a good news for many people in the world. Unfortuna...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, so, still, whereas

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 7.85571142285 229% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 41.998997996 67% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1531.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 296.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.1722972973 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14784890444 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7910701513 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.560810810811 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 483.3 506.74238477 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 16.0721442886 131% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.2975951904 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.9472873269 49.4020404114 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 72.9047619048 106.682146367 68% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.0952380952 20.7667163134 68% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.80952380952 7.06120827912 26% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 3.4128256513 264% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.184286637493 0.244688304435 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0553710702169 0.084324248473 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.058291641447 0.0667982634062 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109703652429 0.151304729494 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00700533893321 0.056905535591 12% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 13.0946893788 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.27 50.2224549098 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.8 11.3001002004 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.11 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.12 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 78.4519038076 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.1190380762 75% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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