You wish to enroll in a course at an Australian college. You have already written a letter to the college asking for information but have received no reply.
Write a letter to the college. In your letter
Express your concern because the course will start in less than two months.
Find out if you can still enroll
Ask for further information about the course, including the cost.
Dear Sir,
I am Sachin Patel writing this letter to remind you on a course information inquiry that I have already written to the college.
As I already mentioned, I have sent a letter last month to your college for the detailed information on the computer science course available in your college. I was eagerly waiting for the reply because I wanted to enroll in this course as soon as possible so that I could start my student visa application for Australia. As per my estimation, I was expecting the reply from you in a week and then I would start the enrolment process but to my surprise I have not received your reply till now. As per college website, the course will start in less than two months and I afraid that I may miss deadline for the course.
Is it still possible for me to enroll in this course as an international student? Please guide me on this and also I am really thankful to you if you can provide me further information about the course, including the fee.
I look forward to your prompt response.
Yours faithfully,
Sachin Patel
I may miss deadline for the course.
I may miss the deadline for the course.
and I afraid that
and I am afraid that
Sentence: As per my estimation, I was expecting the reply from you in a week and then I would start the enrolment process but to my surprise I have not received your reply till now.
Error: enrolment Suggestion: enrollment
flaws:
Don't always use 'I' as subject.
Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 6.5 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 2 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 1 2
No. of Sentences: 10 15
No. of Words: 192 350
No. of Characters: 843 1500
No. of Different Words: 103 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.722 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.391 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.516 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 62 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 42 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 22 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 13 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.2 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.833 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.6 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.428 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.81 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.214 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5