The amount of time spends on sport and exercise should be increased in school in order to tackle the problem of overweight children?
Do you think this the best way to deal with the problem?
What other solutions can you suggest?
Owing to the problem of obesity, it is reckoned by some that educational institutes should ramp up the amount of time for sports and exercise to curb this problem in children. This is an efficient way to tackle this issue but the other solution such as inculcating healthy eating habits in children by parents and the government should launch an awareness crusade to make people aware of good health and bad health.
To begin with, I firmly agree with the notion the schools and other educational institutes impart physical education to the children in order to maintain their good health but it does not mean that then they can intake a huge amount of food. Most of the parents are of the traditional thought that being fat and chubby is a sign of good health hence, they force their child to eat in huge amount which results in obesity. Their aim is just to make their child healthy but unknowingly they ruin their child’s health. For instance, recent research by The Time shows that around 80 percent of the parents believe that chubbiness is the vestige of being healthy. Hence, the government needs to start an awareness campaign to make people learn about the difference between healthy and bad health.
Furthermore, the advancement in the field of food has increased the choices to eat hence, it means that children can adopt ill eating habits. They usually intake high calories food consisting high amount of concentrated fat and also harmful preservative prevent them from spoiling. The intake of such food leads to an increase in cholesterol level, sugar level, and even cause serve heart problems. Therefore, parents should instill healthy eating habits in their children by making food for them at home and obviously saying no to their vague demands as they have the right to say no to their children in order to, maintain their health. Recent research show, the children who are habitual of eating junk food are 80 percent more prone to obesity and other severe diseases rather than, children who eat healthy food.
To conclude, an increase in the time of sports and exercise is an efficient idea of dealing with the increasing obesity among children but parents need to be aware of the difference between healthy and unhealthy bodies. Moreover, parents also need to install healthy eating habits in their children at any cost.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, hence, if, moreover, so, still, then, therefore, for instance, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 41.998997996 152% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1956.0 1615.20841683 121% => OK
No of words: 398.0 315.596192385 126% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91457286432 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46653527281 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44549172706 2.80592935109 87% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.469849246231 0.561755894193 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 582.3 506.74238477 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 50.5241910133 49.4020404114 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.714285714 106.682146367 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.4285714286 20.7667163134 137% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.78571428571 7.06120827912 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.199287103491 0.244688304435 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0747523970761 0.084324248473 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0750113898009 0.0667982634062 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.14576951798 0.151304729494 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0726101238952 0.056905535591 128% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 50.2224549098 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.88 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 78.4519038076 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.5 9.78957915832 199% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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