Are famous people treated unfairly by the media? Should they be given more privacy, or is the price of their fame an invasion into their private life?
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Media plays an important part in our lives. However, some people believe that the famous people are negatively depicted by the media while others reckon that media is the first source that produces the famous people. For many reasons, which will be discussed below, I strongly believe that positive media does not affect the famous people, unlike the negative one which interferes with their private lives.
It is widely agreeable that the positive media makes us well informed about the famous people. To illustrate, we can become so familiar to those famous people and we can get benefit from their good merits. Additionally, we will be able to apply their good conducts in our lives. Needless to say, all people are affected only by the famous people. Consequently, we can imitate them in whatever is positive. In this way, I believe that media should continue to show us those famous people so that we can develop and lead a comfortable life.
Media plays an important role to make someone famous. Mass people from all around the world know about the fame of someone through the media. So in a way, media helps someone to get famous. It is a bad practice for reporter and journalist to take vengeance against some famous celebrities. This should be completely avoided. I completely agree that the famous people should be given their privacy and should not be followed everywhere they go to. This is a basic human right that they often can't enjoy.
The second reason why the positive media is important for famous people is that it enormously increases the fame of those people. Additionally, such famous people will drastically be known all over the world. Hence, the famous people will not only gain their fame medially but rather they will be materialistically and morally rich ones. Accordingly, it can be noticed that famous people get their fame from the media and they will be so grateful to such promising and positive media.
On the other hand, when the negative media is employed in the lives of famous people, it will upset them. In other words, all of us know that some curious media always want to know everything about the famous people. Moreover, it always interferes in their lives and chases them wherever they go. Undoubtedly, such famous people will utterly become dissatisfied with the so-called media since it penetrates their privacy. As a result, this kind of media is surely unwelcome in all communities.
To recap, we have to differentiate between the two kinds of media mentioned above. Positive media contributes widely to the production of famous people while the bad one extremely affects the privacy of those famous people. Hence, we should do our best to encourage the positive media and to prevent such negative one.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, but, consequently, first, hence, however, if, moreover, second, so, well, while, kind of, as a result, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 13.1623246493 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 7.85571142285 229% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 7.30460921844 205% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 59.0 24.0651302605 245% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 41.998997996 124% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2301.0 1615.20841683 142% => OK
No of words: 466.0 315.596192385 148% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.93776824034 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64618479453 4.20363070211 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5236425576 2.80592935109 90% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 176.041082164 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.43347639485 0.561755894193 77% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 738.0 506.74238477 146% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 5.43587174349 294% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 16.0721442886 174% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.3961626484 49.4020404114 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.1785714286 106.682146367 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.6428571429 20.7667163134 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.32142857143 7.06120827912 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.38176352705 137% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 8.67935871743 207% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.299124696135 0.244688304435 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0960487289549 0.084324248473 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0605275528627 0.0667982634062 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.182954699124 0.151304729494 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0551216335619 0.056905535591 97% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 13.0946893788 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 50.2224549098 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.08 12.4159519038 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.55 8.58950901804 88% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 78.4519038076 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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