Being a celebrity such as a famous film star or sports personality brings problems as well as benefits.
Do you think that being a celebrity brings more benefits or more problems.
To be a celebrity such as film star or sports personality it will bring problems as well as benefits. In this statement, I do agree that being in the showbiz it brings more benefits or more problems.
In my opinion, being a celebrity is not an easy thing compare to other jobs. Yes, it will bring more benefits, like you can go to other country or places, you can meet your idols and work with them, you can have a high salary, you can buy or get what you want and also if being an artist is your passion, your dreams can come through. However, with all of those benefits there will be problems as well that you can encounter. For example, before you have those benefits, you need to work hard. First, you need to undergo workshops, so that your skills will enhanced. Secondly, you need to follow all the schedule, instructions, and policies that you signed as a celebrity, because we all know that when we enter the showbiz there will be a contract that you need to follow, whether you like it or not. Yes, you can go to other places, but on the place that you wish you can go, you need to seek an approval first from your handlers. Also, when you are already a famous celebrity, wherever you will go, you need to have bodyguards because your life might be in danger. With regards to this, you need to be careful also in all of your moves, because paparazzi will always follow you even with your private life. Lastly, the problem that you might encounter being a celebrity is when it comes to the point that you are no longer a famous showbiz personality, it will be the start time that you will get depressed and can not work anymore as an artists.
In conclusion, whether being a celebrity or not we will still encounter problems. It is really up to us, as a human if we are going to take it just a trial that we need to surpass or a problem that can defeat us. In addition, there is a saying that before you succeed you will encounter first problems that can help you to be strong.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'enhance'
Suggestion: enhance
...rgo workshops, so that your skills will enhanced. Secondly, you need to follow all the s...
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Line 3, column 963, Rule ID: FAMOUS_CELEBRITY[1]
Message: Use simply 'celebrity'.
Suggestion: celebrity
... handlers. Also, when you are already a famous celebrity, wherever you will go, you need to have...
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'an artist' or simply 'artists'?
Suggestion: an artist; artists
...t depressed and can not work anymore as an artists. In conclusion, whether being a cele...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, lastly, really, second, secondly, so, still, well, for example, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as well as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 13.1623246493 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 32.0 7.85571142285 407% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 7.30460921844 233% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 72.0 24.0651302605 299% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1617.0 1615.20841683 100% => OK
No of words: 375.0 315.596192385 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.312 5.12529762239 84% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40055868397 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.31477419105 2.80592935109 82% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 176.041082164 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.432 0.561755894193 77% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 494.1 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.60771543086 81% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 5.43587174349 276% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Interrogative: 1.0 0.384769539078 260% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.10420841683 285% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 60.6734062191 49.4020404114 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.8 106.682146367 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0 20.7667163134 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.4666666667 7.06120827912 148% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.38176352705 68% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.345845446281 0.244688304435 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.16824169447 0.084324248473 200% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.148784640253 0.0667982634062 223% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.379730901257 0.151304729494 251% => Maybe some contents are duplicated.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.261902651061 0.056905535591 460% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 13.0946893788 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.48 50.2224549098 142% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.01 12.4159519038 65% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.15 8.58950901804 83% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 78.4519038076 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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