Blood sports have become a hot topic for debate in recent years. As society develops it is increasingly seen as an uncivilized activity and cruel to the helpless animals that are killed. All blood sports should be banned. Discuss the main arguments for this statement and give your own opinion.
The human civilization has already reached to such a degree that we are now able to deploy an explorer in Mars, even going beyond Jupiter. However, this civilization did not extend to different parts of human's activity, especially on the blood sports which usually involves killing of animals so to entertain the audience. Many animal lovers has already stepped forward to urge governments to ban the sports. In this essay, we will reveal their arguments behind.
To begin with, the blood sport like hunting is the one of the major culprit causing animal extinction. To demonstrate it, China, where is rich in bamboo, has ever a wonder land to Pandas prior to the hunting start. The hunting almost caused the number of Panda to the edge of extinction. This situation has been alleviated until the Chinese government has enacted a stringent law to prohabit the hunting. Even though the number of Panda is getting increased, the former number of Panda can never be regained.
Another persuasive argument is that the blood sports does advocate violence. Almost all blood sports involve frighting on each others until death on one side. The adults who watchs this kind of cruel game on regular basis will tend to be more violent and bullying. The devastating result is much more profound for children. The games will force them to accept that killing on each others is a natural phenomenon and teach them not to cherish the life. This is a total setback on our civilization.
In my opinion, hunting was only necessity in the stone age. However, we are living in the modern world and no longer need food from hunting. Additionally, there are no winning side no matter in humans and animals prospective. I therefore strongly urge the game holders to stop these uncivilized events.
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Discourse Markers used:
['however', 'if', 'so', 'therefore', 'kind of', 'in my opinion', 'to begin with']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.235119047619 0.247107183377 95% => OK
Verbs: 0.1875 0.155533422707 121% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0714285714286 0.0946595960268 75% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0684523809524 0.0501214627716 137% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0297619047619 0.0437548338989 68% => OK
Prepositions: 0.0982142857143 0.122226691241 80% => OK
Participles: 0.0595238095238 0.0403226058552 148% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.59401006207 2.80594681477 92% => OK
Infinitives: 0.047619047619 0.0326793684256 146% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00163938923432 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.125 0.0861772015684 145% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0119047619048 0.021408717616 56% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00892857142857 0.011925033212 75% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1790.0 1933.35771543 93% => OK
No of words: 301.0 316.048096192 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.94684385382 6.12580529183 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16525528304 4.20517956788 99% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.372093023256 0.374742101984 99% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.255813953488 0.28420135186 90% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.14950166113 0.203846283523 73% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.106312292359 0.137316102897 77% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59401006207 2.80594681477 92% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 176.037074148 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.607973421927 0.56093040696 108% => OK
Word variations: 68.2670345922 60.7387585426 112% => OK
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0891783567 118% => OK
Sentence length: 15.8421052632 20.7743622355 76% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.4924641129 49.517814964 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.2105263158 127.492653851 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.8421052632 20.7743622355 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.368421052632 0.814263465372 45% => More Discourse Markers wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38877755511 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 3.99599198397 50% => OK
Readability: 41.423500612 49.1944974215 84% => OK
Elegance: 1.375 1.69124875643 81% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.311023689966 0.332605444948 94% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0835522247581 0.102741220458 81% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0652232816278 0.0668466124924 98% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.512192320486 0.534860350844 96% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.133449645124 0.148594505496 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111428881883 0.134430193775 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0408675309024 0.0742795772207 55% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.272201164951 0.324371583561 84% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.110574682982 0.0638462369009 173% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.198800569862 0.228012699653 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0292235438921 0.058150111329 50% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.68436873747 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.9879759519 251% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.41683366733 88% => OK
Positive topic words: 3.0 5.90881763527 51% => OK
Negative topic words: 5.0 2.5751503006 194% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 1.9629258517 51% => OK
Total topic words: 9.0 10.4468937876 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.