Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Since the dawn of human, a plethora of rules have been enacted by the governments of leaders of societies in order to strengthen discipline and prevent several accidents and hustles. Young people, nowadays, are expected to obey many rules in their societies. There has been no shortage of debates among scholars on whether these rules are extremely strict for the youths. I vehemently cling to the notion that the currently adopted regulations in the modern world, regardless of the country, are too indeed strict for juveniles and put them under pressure. In the following paragraphs, I will delve into two of my most prominent reasons for advocating this viewpoint.
First and foremost, the speed with which the developments in young people's patterns of thought and insights are taking place, exceeds that of updating the regulations and rules of a society. To be more specific, young people are from a generation where their world views and attitudes are constantly changing due to the ever-increasing pace of changes and events occurring as a result of globalization and advances in technology. These momentary changes in the modern world, encourage the younger ones to break the boundaries and fight with the clichés. The laws governing the current society, however, have been adopted by the ones from the past generations, who do not merely have a proper conception and understanding of the concerns of youths. Therefore, the fact that changes hardly ever occur in those rules, is increasingly confining their lives. As an example, the recently emerged environmental crises have become one of the most significant aspects of young people's concerns. Nevertheless, the rules they have to obey in their societies prevent them from being able to do efficient deeds about them. This is because their societies have not yet reached that point where everyone can perceive the true concerns of our modern and hectic era. Therefore, it is crystal clear that these rules are too strict for young people.
Another equally compelling reason in corroborating my stance lies in the fact that the amount of depression and, consequently, the number of suicides in young people have proven to be extremely high and have reached an unprecedented record in the history. Given the liberal nature of human being, rules, apart from the advantages they offer regarding the organized systems, bring about mental issues in them. Young people, due to their free and wild spirits, are more prone to getting mentally hurt by seeing themselves in a world where they have to conform to lots of rules and social norms caused by policies that do not serve their interests. In fact, the results and statistics of a research conducted recently, indicate that the number of suicides and depressed, hopeless people are representatives of the major consequences of limitations being implemented in a society. It will be more perceivable when one takes a glance at the relative number of deaths in young people compared with the older ones who have learnt to deal with the rules.
To put it all in a nutshell, having all the aforementioned points and examples taken into account, I strongly believe that the copious regulations and rules in societies account for the majority of damages that are being inflicted on the youth's mental health every day. I firmly assert that these rules are too strict, as well as dispensable; meaning that people do not need any of them in order to have an organized country. Gone are days when old-fashioned and senior policy makers could easily enact rules and make decisions for people and make people feel content about them. In fact, I am of the opinion that a highly favorable society for juveniles without strict rules, will not only enhance its people's mood, but also bring up a healthier generation.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, however, if, nevertheless, regarding, so, then, therefore, well, apart from, in fact, as a result, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 13.1623246493 190% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 10.4138276553 240% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 21.0 7.30460921844 287% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 49.0 24.0651302605 204% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 94.0 41.998997996 224% => Less preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3183.0 1615.20841683 197% => OK
No of words: 629.0 315.596192385 199% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.06041335453 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.00798087137 4.20363070211 119% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75853121533 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 317.0 176.041082164 180% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.503974562798 0.561755894193 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 995.4 506.74238477 196% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 8.0 2.52805611222 316% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 16.0721442886 143% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 53.6485094936 49.4020404114 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.391304348 106.682146367 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.347826087 20.7667163134 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.13043478261 7.06120827912 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.205884963683 0.244688304435 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.062926733101 0.084324248473 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.04111670017 0.0667982634062 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133036026907 0.151304729494 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0265019270173 0.056905535591 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 13.0946893788 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 50.2224549098 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.14 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 166.0 78.4519038076 212% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, however, if, nevertheless, regarding, so, then, therefore, well, apart from, in fact, as a result, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 13.1623246493 190% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 10.4138276553 240% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 21.0 7.30460921844 287% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 49.0 24.0651302605 204% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 94.0 41.998997996 224% => Less preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3183.0 1615.20841683 197% => OK
No of words: 629.0 315.596192385 199% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.06041335453 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.00798087137 4.20363070211 119% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75853121533 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 317.0 176.041082164 180% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.503974562798 0.561755894193 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 995.4 506.74238477 196% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 8.0 2.52805611222 316% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 16.0721442886 143% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 53.6485094936 49.4020404114 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.391304348 106.682146367 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.347826087 20.7667163134 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.13043478261 7.06120827912 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.205884963683 0.244688304435 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.062926733101 0.084324248473 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.04111670017 0.0667982634062 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133036026907 0.151304729494 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0265019270173 0.056905535591 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 13.0946893788 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 50.2224549098 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.14 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 166.0 78.4519038076 212% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.