Fewer and fewer people walk daily. What are the reasons and how to encourage them to spend their time walking?
In the modern world, human’s living standard has been rapidly enhanced due to various life-altering benefits brought by technology. However, it is also worth mentioning that a growing number of people have lost their habit of walking regularly. The following paragraphs will discuss the reasons as well as the appropriate measures that need to be implemented to reverse the situation.
The decline in walking may be attributable to a wide range of reasons. First of all, advancement in methods of transportation enables people to reduce a considerable amount of time spent on commuting, which might discourage them from walking. Therefore, the majority of people prefer to take public transports or drive their vehicle rather than walk to the destinations. Additionally, employees in various professions, including medical care workers, painstaking scientists and etc., are required to immerse themselves in their workplace, thereby having no sufficient leisure time that can be spent on walking.
On the other hand, it is essential to taking several steps to rekindle people’s enthusiasm for daily walking. First of all, governments should develop and enforce relevant policies or regulations to conduct strict controls on vehicle use. For instance, they can impose a high tax on the use of petrol and raise public transport fares, which could effectively increase the popularity of active travel such as walking. Furthermore, more public funds should be diverted to the construction of footpaths and walkways to provide walkers with more attractive and comfortable environment to walk.
In summary, it is reasonable to believe that individuals are less likely to walk regularly due to the enhanced methods of transport and more intensive workloads that put a tremendous strain on their everyday life. However, it is worth considering that spending time on daily walking is conducive for each to maintain a healthier lifestyle; thus, people should be encouraged to walk more frequently.
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First of all, advancement in methods of transportation enables people to reduce a considerable amount of time
First of all, the advancement in methods of transportation enables people to reduce a considerable amount of time
First of all, advancements in methods of transportation enable people to reduce a considerable amount of time
flaws:
There are two main flaws in your essays. First, look at those two sentences:
'First of all, advancement in methods of transportation enables people to reduce a considerable amount of time spent on commuting, which might discourage them from walking.'
'Additionally, employees in various professions, including medical care workers, painstaking scientists and etc., are required to immerse themselves in their workplace, thereby having no sufficient leisure time that can be spent on walking. '
They have same structures: one sentence + one clause. It is better to have some sentence varieties in one paragraph. since there are only three sentences.
And be sensitive to use pronouns. Look at 'which might discourage them from walking. ' , 'them' refers to what is not clear. Since it is far from 'people' and 'them'
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Second, don't repeat same phrases, words, like:
it is also worth mentioning
it is worth considering that
it is essential to
it is reasonable to
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 7.5 out of 9
Category: Very Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 13 15
No. of Words: 308 350
No. of Characters: 1644 1500
No. of Different Words: 187 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.189 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.338 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.962 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 136 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 110 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 72 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 53 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.692 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.317 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.846 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.33 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.565 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.053 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 475, Rule ID: AND_ETC[1]
Message: Use simply 'etc.'.
Suggestion: etc.
...al care workers, painstaking scientists and etc., are required to immerse themselves in ...
^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 39, Rule ID: IT_IS_JJ_TO_VBG[1]
Message: Did you mean 'take'?
Suggestion: take
... On the other hand, it is essential to taking several steps to rekindle people's...
^^^^^^
Line 7, column 400, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... be encouraged to walk more frequently.
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, so, therefore, thus, well, for instance, in summary, such as, as well as, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1701.0 1615.20841683 105% => OK
No of words: 308.0 315.596192385 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.52272727273 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18926351222 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.08791155262 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.61038961039 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 522.9 506.74238477 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.932842778 49.4020404114 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.846153846 106.682146367 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.6923076923 20.7667163134 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.8461538462 7.06120827912 168% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.234067083206 0.244688304435 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0787361183337 0.084324248473 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0705138795544 0.0667982634062 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144522560302 0.151304729494 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0794946051203 0.056905535591 140% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 13.0946893788 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.03 12.4159519038 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.96 8.58950901804 116% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 78.4519038076 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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