More children in developed countries are becoming overweight. This is a serious problem
for wealthy countries.
Discuss some causes and effects of this problem. Give reasons for your answer, and
include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Urban country's lifestyle leads young generation towards obesity as; wealth allows inhabitants to buy whatever they desire. However, this purchasing power has enormous consequences on children's health life. Further in this easy I would discus causes and effects.
Modern life is grabbed by unlimited desires though, everyone wishes to reach, and for this people are busy in earning money. At present era people do not have much time to spend in kitchen and, prepare healthy and hygienic food for their love-ones. Hence, they preferred to choose ready-made food items. Simultaneously, children are more attracted to fast food such as pizza, burger and sandwiches which are unhealthy for long-term use. Thus, people do not have time but, may have enough money to spend on expensive unhealthy diet.
Unhealthy habits provoke obesity consequently; children may have less immune power, weak cognitive skills and poor adaptability. For instance, in growing age child needs complete diet plan for healthy growth. Whereas, inorganic food does not fulfill their body and mental health need as a result, health issues may occur i.e. many inorganic food companies products are available in market which are only fulfill food desire but not health need. Such weaknesses do not allow our generation to expel and in long-run would not have a healthy society.
Aforementioned discussion needs attention to overcome this problem. In this regard parents need to play their significant role so that we could completely beat this issue form the root cause and may give healthy habits to our adolescence. If young blood is healthy then would have a strong nation ahead.
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Obesity is a raising problem
Obesity is a raising problem for the children living in economical developed nations. The main cause of the issue is due to increased number of fast food outlets, lack of parent attention which results in offspring poor eating habits and extreme health issues. This essay will highlight the possible reasons and then the consequences of the overweight problems.
One of the reason that people think is the cause of the problem is the exponential growing number of fast food restaurants in developed countries. Fast foods originally were the places where to eat meal few times, but nowadays it become easiest and cheapest solution to have meal on daily basis all around the world. For example, in 2019 it was reported in the Times that 70% of young children consume fast food on average compared to the year 2018. Another reason everyone believe that parents don’t supervise their children eating habits properly causing the overweight problems. Due to the busy work schedule, parents don’t have meal with their children or neither take responsibility to look after their offspring diet habits. Therefore, the children were misguided and attracted to eat junk food more frequently which create overweight problems.
First of all, the main consequence of the unhealthy food habit provokes serious health issue. Fast food contains large number of calories, high saturated fat which people cannot burn it easily. This means the problem does not only create the overweight, besides this, it can cause diabetics, and other heart problems. For example, the recent survey from Medical Associations in USA revealed that the 97% of obese young children are mainly due to bad food habits and only 3% was due to genetic reasons. Secondly, the electronic advancement such as television, mobile phones are another factor for children to gain excess weight as they don’t practice physical exercises regularly. Subsequently, this would result in poor academic results and cause serious mental problems.
To sum up, excessive consumption of junk food and lack of parent attention and physical activity are the causes of the increase in the incidence of obesity.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, hence, however, if, may, so, then, thus, whereas, for instance, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 21.0 41.998997996 50% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1401.0 1615.20841683 87% => OK
No of words: 263.0 315.596192385 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.32699619772 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.02706775958 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59893093768 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.657794676806 0.561755894193 117% => OK
syllable_count: 424.8 506.74238477 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.6968473835 49.4020404114 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.4 106.682146367 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5333333333 20.7667163134 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.86666666667 7.06120827912 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.12210376631 0.244688304435 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0480164122419 0.084324248473 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0485662136896 0.0667982634062 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0852403374218 0.151304729494 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0435000912499 0.056905535591 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 13.0946893788 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 50.2224549098 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.34 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.04 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 78.4519038076 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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