Some believe that advances in technology are increasing the gap between rich and poor while others think the opposite is happening. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.
People have different opinions about whether or not technology has widened the gap between the rich and poor. While some people believe it has, I believe that technology has given poor people the opportunity to get a better education.
Some people believe that technology has further separated the rich from the poor due to the high cost of devices these days. Modern gadgets, including the iPhone and iPad, cost hundreds of dollars, and poor people just cannot afford to buy them. Rich people are the ones who benefit from the newest products and can continue amassing wealth. For example, Jeff Bezos’s entire house is made up of the newest technology, including a voice-activated oven and shower. A poor person could never afford or install this type of software at home.
Even though technology could widen the gap between the upper class and lower class in some ways, I believe that it ultimately narrows it. All people, even low-income communities, now have access to free information online. At no cost, they can research all different subjects online, including science and history, and read electronic books. For example, thirty years ago, children in the underfunded city of Chicago used to score low marks on exams compared to rich children in nearby schools. Nowadays, with affordable technology and free educational websites, these vulnerable students do just as well on their year-end exams as well-off students.
Although there is some evidence to suggest that technology widens the gap between the rich and poor, I believe that it has ultimately decreased it, especially in schools. With the help of the Internet, people of all backgrounds can get a similar education.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
People have different opinions about whether or not technology has widened the gap between ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, so, well, while, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 13.1623246493 23% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1422.0 1615.20841683 88% => OK
No of words: 275.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.17090909091 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07223819929 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66597787248 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 176.041082164 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.585454545455 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 441.9 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 27.1493413308 49.4020404114 55% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 101.571428571 106.682146367 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6428571429 20.7667163134 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.28571428571 7.06120827912 32% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.217580681471 0.244688304435 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0800961663181 0.084324248473 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0894891322387 0.0667982634062 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.160071223133 0.151304729494 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0761707509981 0.056905535591 134% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 13.0946893788 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.71 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 78.4519038076 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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