Some educational systems make students study specialized subjects from the age of fifteen while others require students to study a wide range Discuss both sides and give your own opinion

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Some educational systems make students study specialized subjects from the age of fifteen while others require students to study a wide range.
Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

It is a widely held belief that from the high school, only specialised subjects should be taught to students, but there is a strong counter argument amongst sections of people that students should select wide range of subjects. However, I am of the opinion that this is a matter to be debated in light of several factors before reasonable conclusion can be drawn.
The first and foremost reason is that wide variety of subjects during higher education help students to develop variety of skills. In other words, subjects like arts, music, physical fitness and so on improve children creativity, thinking and physical as well as mental fitness. Eventually, it improves social and inter-personal skills in students.
The second worth mentioning reason here is that students choose their future job according to their interest. Since there are more subjects in school, they will find their favorite subject at young age and follow their passion and interest afterwards. For example, a recent survey conducted by an eminent educationist David Morey at oxford university revealed that students, who choose their favorite subjects during high school, 70 % performs better in university than other students.
On contrary, there are certain group of people who vehemently believe that specialized subjects help student in terms of employment. In other words, if students learn STEM subjects at high school, they do not require to learn basic details in tertiary education. Therefore, student can focus on practical aspect of subjects during university and, so after graduation students will be ready for job without training.
After analyzing both the views, I am of the opinion that although specialized subject is crucial in terms of lucrative job opportunities, students must select wide variety of subject during their young age because this will result in holistic development of children.

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Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, second, so, therefore, well, for example, as well as, in other words

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1595.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 297.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.37037037037 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15134772569 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71134502216 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.572390572391 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 478.8 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.6297512554 49.4020404114 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.916666667 106.682146367 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.75 20.7667163134 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.75 7.06120827912 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.227119694843 0.244688304435 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0845325470305 0.084324248473 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0528694711052 0.0667982634062 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.132697309572 0.151304729494 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0429224331854 0.056905535591 75% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 13.0946893788 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.16 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.97 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 78.4519038076 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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