Some people believe that music should be taught in schools, while others believe that its best to focus on science and computer. Do you agree?
The curriculum is updated regularly according to the needs, interests or abilities of the learners. Owing to this, some educationalist believes that the syllabus should focus on subjects related to science and technology rather than focusing on the music. I argue that teaching science has more benefits than music; however, this cannot be the reason to drop the music subject from the syllabus.
Studying IT and science course provides better job opportunities to the students. Everyone around the globe is talking about intelligent robots, self-driving cars and colonization of Mars. This goal cannot be achieved unless there are enough skilled researchers and engineers. The demand, for instance, for students graduating from science course is ten times more than any other field. Adding to this, the world is facing scarcity of talented researchers in various fields because of which probability of getting a well-paid job is higher than any other field.
Having said that, studying science is not everyone's cup of tea. To succeed in the scientific field, one should be comfortable with mathematics, physics and chemistry. Not every student is interested in studying these subjects; therefore they must be provided with other choices such as music. Besides this, some students are born with an innate talent for music, which makes them more successful in the field of entertainment. For example, Arijit Singh, a well-known singer from India, is far more famous than that of many scientists and researchers. Therefore, excluding the music from the curriculum is not justifiable.
In conclusion, I agree that studies in the field of science and computers provide better opportunities for graduates. However, this cannot be a reason to stop teaching music as some students might have the talent to excel in the field of music.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, however, if, so, therefore, well, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, talking about
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1547.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 290.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.33448275862 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12666770723 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83091687773 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.568965517241 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 468.9 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 28.9621924887 49.4020404114 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 96.6875 106.682146367 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.125 20.7667163134 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.6875 7.06120827912 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.200958336558 0.244688304435 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0671854950184 0.084324248473 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0647542288917 0.0667982634062 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13808398547 0.151304729494 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0579068732991 0.056905535591 102% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 13.0946893788 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.34 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.21 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, however, if, so, therefore, well, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, talking about
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1547.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 290.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.33448275862 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12666770723 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83091687773 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.568965517241 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 468.9 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 28.9621924887 49.4020404114 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 96.6875 106.682146367 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.125 20.7667163134 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.6875 7.06120827912 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.200958336558 0.244688304435 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0671854950184 0.084324248473 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0647542288917 0.0667982634062 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13808398547 0.151304729494 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0579068732991 0.056905535591 102% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 13.0946893788 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.34 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.21 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.