Some people believe that schools should only teach children subjects which are beneficial for their future career and therefore other subjects such as music and sports are not important.To what extent do you agree or disagree?
There is no doubt that childhood is the most important learning phase in an individual's life. While some believe that subjects such as music and sports are not very helpful in future, only subjects which are useful in the professional jobs be taught by schools. I tend to partly agree/disagree with this statement.
Schools should focus on teaching the courses which are a significant part of professional careers. For example, courses related to finance and psychology will be of great use to children who aspires to become an entrepreneur/investor. Teaching such subjects will make the child confident to face the interviews right after school without any nervousness or fear. Learning the things from young age will make the young one's pro in those areas and they will excel and climb the career ladder easily. This will prepare them mentally and help them understand the real-world jobs early in life.
However, subjects like Music and sports should also be taught at school. As these can also form as career options for few individual's when they grow up. For Instance, few children might not be good at academics but excel in sports and cultural arts. And also, every one may not be privileged enough to hire a coach/guru to train them or they might not have the required equipment's to learn. so schools should also offer these courses so the world can witness exceptional players and artists. Playing sports and engaging in arts can also help children relax and enjoy.
In conclusion, courses pertaining to vocations help the individuals to become confident and knowledgeable but music and sports subjects are equally important for the overall development of the child.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 77, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'individuals'' or 'individual's'?
Suggestion: individuals'; individual's
...the most important learning phase in an individuals life. While some believe that subjects ...
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Line 1, column 174, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...s music and sports are not very helpful in future, only subjects which are useful in the ...
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Line 5, column 392, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: So
... have the required equipments to learn. so schools should also offer these courses...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, so, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, no doubt, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 14.0 24.0651302605 58% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1408.0 1615.20841683 87% => OK
No of words: 277.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.08303249097 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07962216107 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7928242094 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 176.041082164 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.56678700361 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 414.9 506.74238477 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.9822180617 49.4020404114 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.8666666667 106.682146367 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4666666667 20.7667163134 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.6 7.06120827912 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.247525262096 0.244688304435 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0831223016834 0.084324248473 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0760821390699 0.0667982634062 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.153390426223 0.151304729494 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0481686884231 0.056905535591 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 13.0946893788 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.66 8.58950901804 89% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 78.4519038076 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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