Some people fail in school, but end up being successful in life. Why do you think that is the case? What is the most important to thing in succeed in life?
We in this century have encountered many celebrities who have initially failed in their school lives but now have become true icons. Being unsuccessful in school lives does not mean anyway that one can do nothing in his or her entire life. It is not system but them who will decide their fate.
To start with, speaking about reasons of being unsuccessful in school age, first and foremost reason could be the education system in which children are merely taught and train to work in factories. From the very beginning, children mind are loaded with pressure of becoming successful in certain fields rather letting them choose their own professions. According to Ken Robinson, famous author of New York Times, education is modelled in the interest and image of Industrial age. There is no room for passion which means their is straight line sketched in front of them and then ask them to walk on it. According to the Peter Gray, the American Psychologist, children do not like to go to the school because they are not free their.
There are few things which need to be remembered. Firstly, receiving lower grades in school does not at all mean that a child will face failure in his entire life. To be the most successful, other skills than academic subjects are more important. According to the Jack Ma, the owner of Alibaba and famous internet businessman clarified in his interview that soft skills are much require in current generations. These skills could be independent thinking, values, care for others, believing and teamwork. These skills are very important to learn because academic education can be taught to the robots too. Apparently robots would take over 800 million jobs by 2030. However, if you possess such soft skills then you certainly have an edge over robots because these machines cannot be taught such skills.
To conclude, current education system need to be replaced with more sophisticated versions where children do not find boring to attend schools. Also, bookish education should be minimized to a great level and innovative skills must be introduced. For instance, Sweden and Singapore are named as having one of the most excellent education system all over the world.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, anyway, apparently, but, first, firstly, however, if, so, then, for instance, in fact, speaking about, to start with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 13.1623246493 175% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1840.0 1615.20841683 114% => OK
No of words: 368.0 315.596192385 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37987740619 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54716844903 2.80592935109 91% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 176.041082164 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.58152173913 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 562.5 506.74238477 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.0635450435 49.4020404114 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.8421052632 106.682146367 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3684210526 20.7667163134 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.42105263158 7.06120827912 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.164579550428 0.244688304435 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0489647108679 0.084324248473 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0410759726078 0.0667982634062 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0958923894749 0.151304729494 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0269055099617 0.056905535591 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 13.0946893788 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 50.2224549098 121% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.72 12.4159519038 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.84 8.58950901804 91% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 78.4519038076 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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