Some people feel that entertainers (e.g. film stars, pop musicians or sports stars) are paid too much money.
Do you agree or disagree?
Which other types of jobs should be highly paid?
Some people believe that income of people in entertainment industry is way more than they deserve, however we cannot generalize this statement. My opinion is that the earning of every person is determine by their talent, efforts and time they invest, however I also feel that some of the professions like teachers or defense officer, should have high wages.
First of all, the entertainers, such as actor, singer or athletic earn lots of money but the source of their revenue is various, like royaltie of their performance, award presented by social and private groups or an advertisement. Though the amount looks very big, the struggle behind the show is also tough. These people keep us entertained with their act and help us to get relaxed from our busy and hectic days. Beside that the earning spam of such people is very short. They deserve our love and encouragement. I also feel that, apart from entertainment, there are many other sectors are essential in our life, like education and board security. Both teacher and military person put equivalent work and risk to keep any country educated and protected. they also work hard to build good education system or protect us from enemy, but in return, they get very less payments. Government should make such rules that will help everyone to become financially stable.
In conclusion - though the perpetrators receive high income, they deserve because of their hard work and talent. However, the other fields such as teaching, or defense officer should also get increased salary as their work is equivalent and undeniable.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'determined'.
Suggestion: determined
... is that the earning of every person is determine by their talent, efforts and time they ...
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Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...e they invest, however I also feel that some of the professions like teachers or defense of...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...efense officer, should have high wages. First of all, the entertainers, such as ...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: They
...eep any country educated and protected. they also work hard to build good education ...
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Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun payments is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...rom enemy, but in return, they get very less payments. Government should make such r...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, look, so, apart from, in conclusion, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 10.4138276553 173% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1322.0 1615.20841683 82% => OK
No of words: 261.0 315.596192385 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.06513409962 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0193898071 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61523642714 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 176.041082164 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.60153256705 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 412.2 506.74238477 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.2790645643 49.4020404114 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.692307692 106.682146367 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0769230769 20.7667163134 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.84615384615 7.06120827912 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.38176352705 68% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0924075262721 0.244688304435 38% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.032511310738 0.084324248473 39% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0289641766513 0.0667982634062 43% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0722326361147 0.151304729494 48% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0309570655566 0.056905535591 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 13.0946893788 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.14 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 78.4519038076 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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