Some people say that parents should encourage their children to take part in organized group activities in their free time. Others say that it is important for children to learn how to occupy themselves on their own. Discuss both view and give your own opinion
Children free time should be spent intelligently. Some believes that organised group activities should be promoted among the youth. While others believe that children should decide themselves on spending their own free times. Both the thoughts will be discussed before a reasonable conclusion is drawn.
First of all, those people who think that group activities are preferable is relevant because it builds the team working in the young children. They can also learn about how to help each other in the bad times. Also, it creates the sense of caring for each other. When children are divided into two groups, each group tries to protect their own team and make sure they are not hurt. For example, when I was young, my team building and caring reason was completely missing until I joined summer camp where I came across children from different background and I analyzed that how children are actually helping each other in accomplishing the missions such activities helped me to increase my team building and caring skills enormously.
On the other hand, if children are allowed to make their own decisions on spending their free times will help them to start believing in themselves. This will help them to take the important decisions of their lives. For example, my friend, since childhood had the authority to choose his own way of life. Now he is grown up and has become one of the successful business person I have known in my city. The reason I found behind his success is he was never pushed by his parents that make him well-confident to take the crucial decisions in his lives and makes the person he is now.
All in all, both side of the arguments about the spending free times of children have strong points. However, after analyzing the camps of both sides, I believe that children should spend time with other children in a group activities because it will help them to face people coming from different background and deal with the difficult times.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...ound and deal with the difficult times.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, first, however, if, so, well, while, for example, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 24.0651302605 179% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 8.3376753507 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1641.0 1615.20841683 102% => OK
No of words: 337.0 315.596192385 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.86943620178 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28457229495 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47000871234 2.80592935109 88% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.528189910979 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 487.8 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.10420841683 285% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 76.6929755584 49.4020404114 155% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.5625 106.682146367 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0625 20.7667163134 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0625 7.06120827912 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.344866489526 0.244688304435 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.1209417059 0.084324248473 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0830479830715 0.0667982634062 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.21210903026 0.151304729494 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0497814427492 0.056905535591 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 50.2224549098 134% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 12.4159519038 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.26 8.58950901804 85% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 78.4519038076 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 9.78957915832 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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