Some people think that the only purpose of working hard is to earn money. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Essay topics:

Some people think that the only purpose of working hard is to earn money. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

At this time money is one of main aspect of our life. Most people working hard for earning money, and thinking that money makes them more successful. But, working hard have a advantages and disadvantages.

In my opinion, on the one hand if people working hard and they earning more money, they can better to provide family, to pay communal payments, to bay material things, to travel, or to spend money for education, even to get better pension payments in a future. As a result to feel self successful.

On the other hand, people who working hard, they are can not to be with family and relatives required time. Moreover, some people must to leave their families and to in foreign country for a long time. As a result, sometime these families can be destroyed. Besides, when people working hard, and resting just a little it can lead to different kind of problems with health, and later they are will spend earned money for a treatment.

To sum up people have a choose, what is better for them. I guess if people working hard, they are more happier and successful unlike who does not. Because they are can to afford much more. But, we have to remember that we have to find time or balance between job, family and relaxing.

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 174, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...more successful. But, working hard have a advantages and disadvantages. In m...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...have a advantages and disadvantages. In my opinion, on the one hand if people...
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Suggestion:
...s, to bay material things, to travel, or to spend money for education, even to ge...
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Line 3, column 265, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...et better pension payments in a future. As a result to feel self successful. ...
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...s a result to feel self successful. On the other hand, people who working ha...
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Line 5, column 56, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'canned'.
Suggestion: canned
...hand, people who working hard, they are can not to be with family and relatives req...
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Line 5, column 133, Rule ID: MUST_HAVE_TO[1]
Message: After 'must', the verb is used without 'to'. Probably, you should use 'must' or 'have to' here.
Suggestion: must; have to
...es required time. Moreover, some people must to leave their families and to in foreign ...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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... spend earned money for a treatment. To sum up people have a choose, what is ...
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Line 7, column 25, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...a treatment. To sum up people have a choose, what is better for them. I guess if pe...
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Line 7, column 101, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'happier' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: happier
... guess if people working hard, they are more happier and successful unlike who does not. Be...
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...ople working hard, they are more happier and successful unlike who does not. Beca...
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Line 7, column 151, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...er and successful unlike who does not. Because they are can to afford much more. But,...
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Line 7, column 158, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... successful unlike who does not. Because they are can to afford much more. But, w...
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Line 7, column 169, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'canned'.
Suggestion: canned
... unlike who does not. Because they are can to afford much more. But, we have to re...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, if, moreover, so, i guess, kind of, as a result, in my opinion, to sum up, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 41.998997996 67% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalization wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1013.0 1615.20841683 63% => OK
No of words: 220.0 315.596192385 70% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.60454545455 5.12529762239 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.85128510684 4.20363070211 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.35338247867 2.80592935109 84% => OK
Unique words: 125.0 176.041082164 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.568181818182 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 315.0 506.74238477 62% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Interrogative: 2.0 0.384769539078 520% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.1419425562 49.4020404114 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 77.9230769231 106.682146367 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.9230769231 20.7667163134 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.15384615385 7.06120827912 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 5.01903807615 279% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.263926069869 0.244688304435 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0946040375158 0.084324248473 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.080687488469 0.0667982634062 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.174111390672 0.151304729494 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0685568437997 0.056905535591 120% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.7 13.0946893788 66% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 50.2224549098 144% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 11.3001002004 64% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 9.1 12.4159519038 73% => Coleman_liau_index is low.
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.37 8.58950901804 86% => OK
difficult_words: 41.0 78.4519038076 52% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => The average readability is low. Need to improve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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