Some people think that professional athletes make good role models for young people, while others believe they don't.
Discuss both these points and give your own opinion.
Majority people believe that sportsperson are idols for young generation. However, others are of the opinion that this may not be the case. I too agree with the latter statement.
Albeit, athletes outstanding in their respective profession do inspire the milennials to follow their footsteps, however, this impact is governed by their success rate. For instance, if the player wins people start admiring him and hence aspire to become one. On the contrary, if they lose, the same people become judgmental. In this scenario, one loses interest in the respective field as a consequence of their role models failure.
In addition, in a rat race to gain popularity, athletes portray a good and fair image in front of public. They might also start endorsing some products. The masses being fascinated with the same are sometimes mislead. Consequently, people ignore that this cadre of personalities are also human and can commit error. This ignorance as a bliss distracts them from their prime objective in life and they move towards pursuing their idols journey.
On the other hand, athletes are considered as mentors for a huge number of population. Their achievements bring pride and glory to the nation and thereby inculcate sense of brotherhood among us. Moreover, it can become a carrier option for many job-seekers to efficiently earn their bread and butter.
To recapitulate, due to the aforementioned reasons, fan following can have its own upsides and downsides. Anything beyond an optimum level is a precursor for the detriment of social well-being.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 210, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'misled'.
Suggestion: misled
... fascinated with the same are sometimes mislead. Consequently, people ignore that this ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, hence, however, if, may, moreover, so, well, for instance, in addition, on the contrary, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 41.998997996 67% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1323.0 1615.20841683 82% => OK
No of words: 251.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.27091633466 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98032404683 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86590739273 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.649402390438 0.561755894193 116% => OK
syllable_count: 415.8 506.74238477 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.2975951904 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.3252267454 49.4020404114 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 77.8235294118 106.682146367 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.7647058824 20.7667163134 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.70588235294 7.06120827912 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.163783810791 0.244688304435 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0513586846312 0.084324248473 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0434516178561 0.0667982634062 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0867840539979 0.151304729494 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0366542685488 0.056905535591 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 13.0946893788 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 48.81 50.2224549098 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.69 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.3 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.1190380762 75% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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