Attending a live event or watching it on TV
When it is time to choose to attend a live performance or watch it on TV, some people prefer the latter. They believe that television provides them a conforting place to enjoy an event miles far away. It is partly true, however, I personally prefer to attend a live performance rather than watching it on TV. For one, all the operation, from buying the ticket through being live at the performance, could bring lots of fun. Moreover, by attending a live event, families find some time to be outdoors together. Also, it could be some time to get more familiar with other cultures.
Firstly, attending a live performance is usually involved with a long process that would be enjoyable. It is definitely true that attending a performance would cost more that watching it on TV, but it brings more joy to people instead. For example, one has to purchase a ticket, go to the performance site and buy something to eat. Nonetheless, going and standing in lines to buy ticket is always exciting for people. They eagerly wait to finally buy the ticket by which they can attend the event they were waiting for. Additionally, the real excitement is only find at the live event while all other audiences cheer and shout. This is the feeling never could be achieved by solid watching the performance on TV.
Another good reason that I think it is a good idea to attend a live performance is that it could provide families a good opportunity to re-union somewhere out of their own homes. Presumably, people are now more sick of a hectic day-to-day life than ever before, so obviously they need to feel relaxed and free from their routine lives. What is better than a live concert where they can gather together and spend their leisure time among their families. Moreover, children are the main group who benefits from such variation. According to some psychologists, attending a live performance, such as a concert or even watching movies in the cinema enables children to feel safe. The reason certainly lies under the fact that children feel that they are warmly protected by their parents when they find themselves next to them without the presence of any telecommunications, that is, internet, mobile phones and even television.
Finally, attending a live concert gives people the opportunity to increase their familiarity about other people or even other nations. People tend to communicate with others surrounding their seats and they talk about their cultures. For instance, world cup 2002 gave my family the opportunity to find friends from different parts of the world while we stayed in an international hotel. Furthermore, families usually tend to visit other public places, such as historical palaces or museums that give them more information about lifestyle and culture of other nations.
Overall, counting all these factors into account, I personally believe that attending a live event offers more advantages than watching it on television.
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'finally', 'first', 'firstly', 'furthermore', 'however', 'if', 'moreover', 'nonetheless', 'so', 'while', 'as to', 'for example', 'for instance', 'i think', 'such as']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.211009174312 0.229887763892 92% => OK
Verbs: 0.165137614679 0.158761421928 104% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0899082568807 0.0866891130778 104% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0715596330275 0.046263068375 155% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0678899082569 0.0685040099705 99% => OK
Prepositions: 0.104587155963 0.118717715034 88% => OK
Participles: 0.0440366972477 0.0351676179071 125% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.76176585141 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0403669724771 0.0309702414327 130% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0899082568807 0.0887237588012 101% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0146788990826 0.0209618222197 70% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0146788990826 0.0139019557991 106% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2985.0 2387.08602151 125% => OK
No of words: 492.0 408.028673835 121% => OK
Chars per words: 6.06707317073 5.86048508987 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70967865282 4.48200974243 105% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.339430894309 0.338922669872 100% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.256097560976 0.251872472559 102% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.193089430894 0.174417080927 111% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.123983739837 0.112833075102 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76176585141 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 246.0 212.727598566 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.524397521467 95% => OK
Word variations: 58.4744805911 59.2087087015 99% => OK
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6684587814 116% => OK
Sentence length: 20.5 20.5533526081 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.7040257018 48.84282405 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.375 120.699889404 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5 20.5533526081 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.708333333333 0.644075263715 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.54480286738 72% => OK
Readability: 46.1097560976 45.7405998639 101% => OK
Elegance: 1.18072289157 1.45489161554 81% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.264037709629 0.300154397459 88% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0975727800841 0.103427244359 94% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.071240357643 0.0752933317313 95% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.471532156453 0.497263757937 95% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.147124184779 0.151897553556 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0997441711279 0.114077575197 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.108105327646 0.0781384742642 138% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.315025522523 0.336927656856 93% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.174424305425 0.067059652881 260% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.206876711165 0.210909579961 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.111834283245 0.0618886996521 181% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8870967742 151% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.86379928315 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.91756272401 122% => OK
Positive topic words: 15.0 8.42114695341 178% => OK
Negative topic words: 0.0 2.4623655914 0% => More negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 4.0 2.75985663082 145% => OK
Total topic words: 19.0 13.6433691756 139% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 80.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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