Children should do household jobs or only study
Children are not as mature as their parents; however, they become gradually mature through their childhood experiences. I believe it is of high importance for children to accept some responsibilities of household chores, which deepens their perception of being responsible, helps them to have a good self-image, and teaches them themwork. I am going to express my point of view in the following passage.
To begin with, being responsible for something that influences the lives other than one’s self, has a significant effect on how a child finds his or her role in the world around. As a personal example, l would like to say that my mom used to ask me to do the dishes after dinner. I knew that my mom counted on me and I was the one who was to put the kitchen in the order after the night meal. This simple task helped me to feel valuable and influential. Studying was part of my education, which I did anyway. However, participating in household jobs was something extra that gave me the image of someone who is important at home.
Moreover, having part in household chores teaches the children how to cooperate with others and how to do teamwork. It is no doubt that a grownup person, who has a job, needs to be capable of working as a team. In most of the modern professions, it is mandatory to work as a part of a big work society. My personal experience can well illustrate how responsibilities I had as a child helped me to be a reliant colleague as an adult. When I was young, I knew that if I left dishes and missed the task I was responsible for, my mom would do it late at night. Thus, she would not have time to be by my bed for a bedtime story. I learnt that cooperation keeps a system efficient and benefits all members of a team. This is not a pearl of wisdom that anybody can achieve through theories. Therefore, personal experiences in childhood are highly needed to build such a mentality.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that being totally involved in formal studying is not enough, and children must participate in household tasks. Because this helps them to build their self-confidence and self-value, as well as to learn teamwork and its importance.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion:
.... Because this helps them to build their self-confidence and self-value, as well ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
anyway, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, thus, well, as to, in conclusion, no doubt, as well as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1800.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 390.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.61538461538 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44391917772 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88898700081 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.525641025641 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 556.2 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.6248343845 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.0 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.75 5.45110844103 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.14751550225 0.236089414692 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0412558330996 0.076458572812 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0562019859256 0.0737576698707 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0937028257455 0.150856017488 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0149163271595 0.0645574589148 23% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 11.7677419355 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.52 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.98 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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