A city wants to help teachers of its high school students (ages 14-18) improve their teaching. It is considering two plans:
1. Choose a small group of excellent teachers; these teachers will attend a class led by an expert for additional training in how to teach effectively, and they will then come back to their schools and provide that training for other teachers in school.
2. Provide additional training in teaching effectively for high school teachers, using online material that each teacher will study individually.
Throughout history, education has played prominent role in all societies. Teachers are people who have a paramount responsibility in this process (education). All societies would like to have knowledgeable, erudite and aware teachers, therefore educational system help their teachers to improve their teaching. There are some ways to do this work. First, educational system could choose a small group of excellent teacher and educate them with additional training to learn how teach effectively by an expert and these teachers will then come back to their schools and provide that training for other teachers in school. Second way is that additional training learns all teachers how teach effectively through online material that each teacher will study individually. Certainly, some people if asked would agree with the first way while others would believe that the second way is far better. As far as I’m concerned, I adopt a firm position that the first way is most rational particularly online classes to be without any interruption or something. In what follows I will cogently pinpoint my most conspicuous reasons to justify my point of view.
First of all, it is important to consider in first way, some information from training would be lost when excellent teachers are going to explain them for other teachers, that is, excellent teachers’ inattention or forgetfulness would hurt this educational process, while in second way all teacher learn additional training individually. In online classes, teachers could listen and learn directly and without intermediary. For instance, my sister is teacher and always tells me that online class for additional training is far better than other way. She says that other employees agree with her, too. As you can see, online class is more logical because it is held directly and without any intermediary.
Equally important point to be mention is that cost of online class is lower than first way. Of course, in some situation it would be incorrect. However, in most cases first way is more costly when teachers take part in training classes there are some costs for everybody that are no negligible. For example, my sister’s school has discarded such classes and has recently commenced online classes because former classes included additional costs like fruits and confectionery’ costs. Therefore second educational system is more rational when authorities have not to spend additional costs.
Finally, concentration is much more in online classes rather than first way. I’ll be first to admit that in first way may be exist enough concentration particularly if authorities to be strict adequately. Despite this possibility, in online classes because there are not any crowded environments, teacher could focus on their training. This reason is very invisible that everybody could verify. Thus it is better to do second way for better results in teaching of additional training.
By way of conclusion, based on the arguments explored above, I’m of the opinion that in most cases online classes is far better way to improve teachers’ knowledge and teaching abilities through additional training. Not only will improve their education but also schools could save more money and times and increase concentration. That’s why educational authorities must be aware about benefits of online classes and virtual education. As a result, I suggest conducting more surveys and studies to answer this question more precisely.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Equally,
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Suggestion: Therefore,
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Suggestion: Thus,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, may, second, so, then, therefore, thus, while, for example, for instance, of course, as a result, first of all, in most cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 31.0 15.1003584229 205% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 9.8082437276 184% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2969.0 1977.66487455 150% => OK
No of words: 547.0 407.700716846 134% => OK
Chars per words: 5.42778793419 4.8611393121 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.83611736076 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93846669651 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 249.0 212.727598566 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.45521023766 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 911.7 618.680645161 147% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 66.5281895139 48.9658058833 136% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.035714286 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5357142857 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.89285714286 5.45110844103 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.243951510186 0.236089414692 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0680425089223 0.076458572812 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0842865845317 0.0737576698707 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.150560958841 0.150856017488 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0757953248738 0.0645574589148 117% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 11.7677419355 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 58.1214874552 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.21 10.9000537634 130% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.96 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 86.8835125448 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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