A company is going to give some money either to support the arts or to protect the environment. Which do you think the company should choose? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
As time goes by, in all over the world has the modern society gone through some environmental changes by enormous impacts of developing the industry. In fact, industry continues to pose a potential threat to nature, so in the globe is protecting the environment an urgent issue. Although some people hold the opinion that producing masterpieces in comparison with improving the environment is more significant, I am in the belief that allocating money to preserve nature is much more important than supporting art due to helping to decrease pollution and developing parks.
First and foremost, decreasing pollution such as both air and water pollution is a remarkable benefit of protecting nature. It is crystal-clear that in today’s modern world, by the growth of population and their demand for life mechanized, pollution has become a major problem in most cities, so environment needs much attention because of not only human's life but also all wildlife depends on. Actually, were I a master of companies, I would prefer to spend much money for protecting our surroundings. In fact, with developing technology and industry, a large number of factories, vehicles, and other companies are constructed that all of them have crucial roles in production pollution, dirt, and soot that is why as time marches on, we run into several problems which threat our healthy. For examples, a recent statistic in this field represents that there has been a dramatic rise in the number of people who suffer from several diseases such as cancer, respiration disorders and other diseases due to increasing the level of pollution. Moreover, some factories release their waste to nature, so they hurt to all natural sources like forests, oceans, seas and so on. Hence, companies that pay out money for protecting environment help not only people’s lives but also all ecosystems.
Another subtle point is that, having public parks can be considered another advantage of spending money by companies for protecting the environment. It goes without saying that we are living in an age in which technology plays a significant role as far as the development of a nation is concerned; hence, technology is developing so fast that people could not keep up with them unless they work hard. As a matter of fact, in our modern era do have people hectic schedules for making progress in their life so their needs for having peaceful places will be increasing day to day. In my personal opinion when companies spend money on building parks and places for relaxation and entertainment, they help people to release their stress after their works and also obtain new energy for making better future, so they can have a healthy and prosperous community undoubtedly. According to recent research done by psychologists conducted that every society that develops many parks, forests, and gardens as public places for enhancing enjoyment between people have made progress more than do other ones. As a result, investing money for developing park not only protect the environment but also bring delighted for people after arduous works.
In a nutshell, it is obvious that spending money for protecting the environment is more urgent and important than the other option. In fact, not only human’s health but also the health of all ecosystems depends on a safe nature. How can we breathe without a clean air? How can we enjoy free time without walking or playing in parks and gardens? Can supporting art prepare a convenient life for human and other creatures? I absolutely believe no.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rease pollution and developing parks. First and foremost, decreasing pollution...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'humans'' or 'human's'?
Suggestion: humans'; human's
...eeds much attention because of not only humans life but also all wildlife depends on. ...
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Line 3, column 411, Rule ID: WERE_VBB[1]
Message: Did you mean 'where' or 'we'?
Suggestion: where; we
...also all wildlife depends on. Actually, were I a master of companies, I would prefer...
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Message: Did you mean 'am' (first person of "to be")?
Suggestion: am
...l wildlife depends on. Actually, were I a master of companies, I would prefer to ...
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Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...ith developing technology and industry, a large number of factories, vehicles, and other companie...
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Message: Use simply 'opinion'.
Suggestion: opinion
...es will be increasing day to day. In my personal opinion when companies spend money on building ...
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Discourse Markers used:
['actually', 'also', 'but', 'first', 'hence', 'if', 'moreover', 'so', 'for example', 'in fact', 'such as', 'as a matter of fact', 'as a result']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.254601226994 0.229887763892 111% => OK
Verbs: 0.15490797546 0.158761421928 98% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0889570552147 0.0866891130778 103% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0506134969325 0.046263068375 109% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0414110429448 0.0685040099705 60% => OK
Prepositions: 0.148773006135 0.118717715034 125% => OK
Participles: 0.0644171779141 0.0351676179071 183% => Less participles wanted.
Conjunctions: 2.840840706 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0184049079755 0.0309702414327 59% => OK
Particles: 0.00306748466258 0.00188951952338 162% => OK
Determiners: 0.0766871165644 0.0887237588012 86% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0122699386503 0.0209618222197 59% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0153374233129 0.0139019557991 110% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3566.0 2387.08602151 149% => OK
No of words: 583.0 408.028673835 143% => OK
Chars per words: 6.1166380789 5.86048508987 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.91379618374 4.48200974243 110% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.380789022298 0.338922669872 112% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.284734133791 0.251872472559 113% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.204116638079 0.174417080927 117% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.164665523156 0.112833075102 146% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.840840706 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 292.0 212.727598566 137% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.500857632933 0.524397521467 96% => OK
Word variations: 61.7811958944 59.2087087015 104% => OK
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6684587814 106% => OK
Sentence length: 26.5 20.5533526081 129% => OK
Sentence length SD: 80.9937886609 48.84282405 166% => OK
Chars per sentence: 162.090909091 120.699889404 134% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.5 20.5533526081 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.590909090909 0.644075263715 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.54480286738 108% => OK
Readability: 54.9734133791 45.7405998639 120% => OK
Elegance: 1.89440993789 1.45489161554 130% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.242686352608 0.300154397459 81% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.114826601155 0.103427244359 111% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0836293669815 0.0752933317313 111% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.45597380932 0.497263757937 92% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.139204421759 0.151897553556 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0922362375434 0.114077575197 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0754837944222 0.0781384742642 97% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.39063611039 0.336927656856 116% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0620102544785 0.067059652881 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.191616907666 0.210909579961 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0846555343118 0.0618886996521 137% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8870967742 109% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.86379928315 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.91756272401 41% => OK
Positive topic words: 11.0 8.42114695341 131% => OK
Negative topic words: 5.0 2.4623655914 203% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.75985663082 72% => OK
Total topic words: 18.0 13.6433691756 132% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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