Do you agree of disagree with following statement?
People learn things better from those at their own level- such as fellow students or co-workers - than from those at a higher level, such as teacher or supervisors.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Modern life demand people must study a lot to improve both knowledge and way to income many issues. It is argued that if learning from people at the same level is better than from people at higher level. In my opinion, I believe people from higher level have a lot of wonderful things to learn.
People at a higher level, they certainly have a lot of knowledge and experience which are very valuable for us to learn. For example, our teachers are people who understand deeply about specified subjects. Learning from them help people have more truly and useful information than learning from our friends, people at the same level with us. Besides that, our teachers have already been students before becoming professors, they understand what is the issue of their students to help us to improve more effective. What is more, teachers also have both experience of teachers and students, they can be our teacher and our friends who share life with us too. In general, learning from people at a higher level help us develop more quickly and of course it is better than just studying from people at our own level.
Additionally, people at higher level have a lot of thing for us to studying not just knowledge. I mean it is their good viewpoint. In order to reach to their positon, they have had to undergo varieties of difficulties to accumulate their valuable experience. In the road to their position, they have built their viewpoint which is very wonderful if we afford to learning it. My professors at university is an example. Time when I study and work with her, I have change to understand her more and also know about her perspective. She has patience more than all people I know, she is very brave too. I mean braving when she receives very difficult topics and bring them to good result. In fact, I always wish to learn those viewpoints from her.
Some people can say that learning from people at the same level is easier than from people at higher level because people can say all their issues more nature and not scare be commented. However, I believe it is justification of people who not enough confident about themselves. Nowadays, people at higher level always ready to share their knowledge and their experience because they understand the important of sharing things what they have. In basically learning from them is better than people at the same level with us.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 43, Rule ID: A_LOT_OF_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun thing seems to be countable; consider using: 'a lot of things'.
Suggestion: a lot of things
...ditionally, people at higher level have a lot of thing for us to studying not just knowledge. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, however, if, so, for example, i mean, in fact, in general, of course, in my opinion, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 60.0 43.0788530466 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1968.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 415.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.7421686747 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51348521516 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47937639367 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 212.727598566 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.412048192771 0.524837075471 79% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 612.0 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.5514363292 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.4545454545 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8636363636 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.09090909091 5.45110844103 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.383035951864 0.236089414692 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.142900653483 0.076458572812 187% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.127354799251 0.0737576698707 173% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.284325401734 0.150856017488 188% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0702797787571 0.0645574589148 109% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.21 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.85 8.01818996416 85% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 86.8835125448 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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