Do you agree or disagree with the following examples?
It's good to study abroad than studying home.
Education is the focal point of most deliberations in modern society, and any argument or dispute about it would indeed smack into headlines. Regarding this issue, while some people advocate that students should study abroad due to its benefits, others believe that studying in their hometowns is better. personally, I am in agreement with the former stand primarily because of two reasons, which I will explore in the following paragraphs.
First and foremost, I am of the same mind with the aforementioned principle for the fact that studying in other countries equips individuals with wide experiences and knowledge. Oftentimes, people who reside in just one country throughout their entire academic life, are prone to be both limited in perspective and narrow-minded. On the other hand, individuals who have studied abroad, are usually better informed and have a wider variety of experiences that can later help them to succeed and become a renowned human being. Although there is no conclusive scientific evidence of a cause and effect relationship, ample anecdotal evidence establishes a significant correlation. Five years ago, I decided to move to Australia and study there as an exchange student. During my stay, not only did I gain a considerable amount of life experiences, but I also obtained countless knowledge about the culture and lifestyle of Australia. A few years after, my experiences played a prominent role when getting a job position, as I clearly had more practical and empirical knowledge than other candidates. this example demonstrates the importance and merits of studying in a foreign country.
Another equally important and noteworthy reason is that people can acquire and enhance their fluency in a language, and as a result, become more competitive in the modern world. it is an undeniable fact that languages have always been a vital tool for communication, especially, when businesses are trying to come to an agreement or make a deal with other international corporations. Therefore, the more languages a person is able to manage, the more competitive he or she will become in the twentieth-first century. To illustrate this point, I will give a personal example. Since I was a child, my parents frequently send me to numerous countries, such as Spain, Australia, and Japan. this situation enabled me to become articulate in Spanish, English, and Japanese; apart from my mother tongue, which is Korean. On account of this, last year, I was able to easily and effortlessly get a position in an acknowledged Korean company. this illustrates the point that people can become more competent and qualified if they study in other places than their birthplace.
Admittedly, some might argue that studying home prevents people from getting overloaded with stress and from suffering enormous psychological trauma. However, based on the aforesaid ideas related to knowledge and language acquisition, we can conclude that studying abroad is much greater than studying home.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, regarding, so, therefore, while, apart from, such as, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 13.8261648746 174% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2527.0 1977.66487455 128% => OK
No of words: 476.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.30882352941 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67091256922 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05496209657 2.67179642975 114% => OK
Unique words: 283.0 212.727598566 133% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.594537815126 0.524837075471 113% => OK
syllable_count: 815.4 618.680645161 132% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.6708942755 48.9658058833 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.333333333 100.406767564 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6666666667 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.47619047619 5.45110844103 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.21556377357 0.236089414692 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0602831824945 0.076458572812 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.073322638005 0.0737576698707 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.153698600062 0.150856017488 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0812325173469 0.0645574589148 126% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 11.7677419355 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 58.1214874552 70% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 10.1575268817 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.81 10.9000537634 127% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.74 8.01818996416 121% => OK
difficult_words: 151.0 86.8835125448 174% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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