Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Attending a live performance (for example, a play, concert, or sporting event) is more enjoyable than watching the same event on television. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
Considering the wide spectrum of interests and attitudes among people, different people will give different responses to this question. Some may hold an opinion that attending a live performance is more enjoyable. However, others may have a relative negative point of view. As far as I am concerned, I think, although attending a live performance has its own advantages and disadvantages, disadvantages is dominant. There are various reason that support my point of view. To clarify my position, I will present below some of the important logical reasons.
One of the primary is that, although attending a live performance usually requires money, watching it on television is free. Apart from purchasing ticket, attending performance usually need people to travel long distances and obviously this issue could be very suffering. First because traveling a long distance is a time-consuming and secondly, most of the time it requires large amount of money. To put it another way, attending a live performance requires both much time and large amount of money.
Second, nowadays, there are increasing number of people who are very interested to attend live performances specially concerts. Therefore, these performances are very crowded. This huge number of people could produce tremendous amount of noise. Honestly speaking, it is very annoying. I can watch a live performance easily on television without any suffering noise and without any trouble coming from a crowded place.
There is a more subtle point that we should consider. Although two previous reasons are about disadvantages of attending live performances, there is a important merit of attending such performances. It is true that most of the performances require ticket and need us to spend money, but it is not true that all of them are crowded and noisy. Moreover, attending some of these performances are very much more enjoyable than just sitting home and watch them on television. For example, suppose a swimming sport competition. Attending it is not noisy at all and watching it from a near place is very attractive.
To sum up, if all above convincing factors are contemplated, we reach the conclusion that, although attending a live performance has its own merits and demerits, its demerits weigh much heavier than its merits. The two previous mentioned disadvantages are convincing enough to make me to hold an negative point of view toward attending a live performance.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, honestly, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, apart from, for example, i think, it is true, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2059.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 391.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.26598465473 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44676510885 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03576361104 2.67179642975 114% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.50895140665 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 659.7 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.2126233045 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.5217391304 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.45110844103 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.198004307149 0.236089414692 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0606219759592 0.076458572812 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0522563379854 0.0737576698707 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111982664199 0.150856017488 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0474906843494 0.0645574589148 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 11.7677419355 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.99 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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