Some people may think that watching a performance on television is as good as or better than attending a live performance. In particular, they may feel that they would be free and comfortable in their house watching the event on TV. However, I agree with the idea that attending a live performance is much more better than watching the same thing on TV. This preference will be exemplified in the forth following paragraphs which focusing mainly on Two fundamental reasons.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that live performances such as plays, concerts, or sporting events, are all large community events. They often encourage people to gather with friends and family to enjoy the entertainment. Community gatherings incite stories, conversation, and other significant interactions that are essential to being human. These same gatherings also can allow people to meet others who share similar interests and thus create new relationships that couldn’t have happened at home. An event that encourages conversation and interpersonal interactions are better than isolation. I will give my husband as example use to go to watch soccer games in the stadium, and he always goes with all of his friends. When he comes back, telling me that he gets so much fun with his friends. They are cracking many jocks together, talking about many issues. As a result, he feels more relaxable. He becomes so lovely to us. As you can see, watching a live performance with your friends or even with your family members has a significant impact on his work as well as on his personal life. He will be able to work with full enthusiasm, and he will be able to spend quality of time with his family members.
Another salient point in corroborating with my stance is that when you go to the performance, you feel more real than watching the same performance on TV. What is more, in live performance, you will be with so many people, who came to watch that performance. When people surround you, you could enjoy the performance more because you get affected by others influence. I feel that sharing synergy or same feelings with other people is an important thing too. As I mentioned in my precede example, my husband uses to go with his friends to watch soccer games in the stadium. I always thought that he could watch it on TV rather than going to the stadium, but he refuses. Once, I decided to go with him to the stadium. It was amazing. I don't like football at all, but on that day, I enjoyed my time. It was a significant difference than watching the game on TV and seeing the other happiness when our team achieves a goal. Even though, I don't like football that much, I was so happy and excited that day when I saw the game directly at the stadium, and shared the other emotion.
As all things considered, watching a live performance is more enjoyable than sitting at home watching it. When it comes to spending quality of time with your friends and sharing the others' emotion.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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... time with your friends and sharing the others emotion.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, so, thus, well, i feel, in particular, such as, talking about, as a result, as well as, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 24.0 11.0286738351 218% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 72.0 43.0788530466 167% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.0752688172 223% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2471.0 1977.66487455 125% => OK
No of words: 519.0 407.700716846 127% => OK
Chars per words: 4.76107899807 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7730044521 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75852378717 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 237.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.456647398844 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 761.4 618.680645161 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 23.0 9.59856630824 240% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6003584229 141% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.127204328 48.9658058833 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.2068965517 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8965517241 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.68965517241 5.45110844103 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 23.0 11.8709677419 194% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.262961731666 0.236089414692 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.07307297533 0.076458572812 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0663316864775 0.0737576698707 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.185858340423 0.150856017488 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0268281839006 0.0645574589148 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 11.7677419355 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.03 10.9000537634 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.25 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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