Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Businesses should do anything they can to make a profit. Use specific reasons and examples to support your position.
Money is one the most important aspects of our lives since you need that to be able to buy things and to provide a high standard living for yourself. Nowadays some people may hold the opinion that businesses should do anything to make profit as if it is a general truth. But to be frank, I cannot agree with them. I strongly believe that businesses should have some rules in their work for the following reasons.
Firstly, if businesses do anything they want, it results in a chaos in their business field. Following some certain rules helps the business to be safe and healthy. For example, Khodro is one of the biggest car companies in Iran which has a lot of costumers. In 2011, its managers decided to increase the number of the cars they produce to twenty percent. They did that while their decision brought about a lot of critics from other companies and famous economists. The result was a disaster. Because of existence of large number of cars in market, the price dropped down to the such extent that not only many small companies stop working but also Khodro producing line got out of the work. As you can see, violation of rules causes a crisis in market.
Secondly, it causes a crisis in other related businesses. Many of businesses are related to each other and any change in one business influences other businesses greatly. For instance, almost everyone knows about the relation between oil and car businesses. Every small change in the price of oil alters the price of car, the rate of car production and even results in change in related car industry such as petroleum. Increasing oil price results in increasing car price. This increase sometimes is very much and causes that people cannot buy car and therefore a crisis in car businesses is predictable. Consequently, doing everything by businesses results a bad crisis in related businesses.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that businesses should obey some morally business rules. Not only is the result a chaos by doing everything, but also it causes a crisis in related businesses. Therefore, the law is a good thing and everybody should obey that.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 488, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[4]
Message: The adverb 'sometimes' is usually put after the verb 'is'.
Suggestion: is sometimes
... in increasing car price. This increase sometimes is very much and causes that people cannot...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1767.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 366.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.82786885246 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37391431897 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62065729645 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.489071038251 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 564.3 618.680645161 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.0368812685 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.3181818182 100.406767564 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.6363636364 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.31818181818 5.45110844103 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.182546925016 0.236089414692 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0598833352273 0.076458572812 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0660764225959 0.0737576698707 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.127710260255 0.150856017488 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0553849628924 0.0645574589148 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.32 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 86.8835125448 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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