Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Children now are often required to spend most of their free time doing homework, participating in school-organized activities, or exercising; however, children should do whatever they want to do in their free time.
Nowadays, there is a lot of debate among people on how children fill their free time. In my opinion, I do believe that children should spend their leisure time on doing exercise because not only does it help them to improve their communication skills but also they are not mature enough to do whatever they want as well. I feel this way for two main reasons, which will be discussed in the ensuing paragraph.
To begin with, doing exercise would be a great chance for children to learn how to communicate with others during their free time. As a matter of fact, they would be able to interact with many children during their leisure time that enables them to exchange their ideas with children who are in the same age. By sharing their thoughts and information, they are allowed to learn how to behave with others which bring those several lucrative consequences such preparation for future. Since they are supposed to attend the society in the future, they can learn how to interact with others effectively. An example will illustrate this viewpoint much better. When I was a child around 7, my father enrolled me in a football club near our home to do exercise by playing football after my school actually in my free time. It was a great chance for me because I learned how to talk with others and how to share my ideas during doing physical activities. It helped me a lot to use improve my social skills. As a result, had I done exercise in my free time when I was a child, I would not have had the chance to boost my communication skills.
Furthermore, it is established beyond doubt that one the one hand some people believe that if they are required to do some activities, we deprive their freedom to learn how to spend their free time, yet on the other hand, others believe that they are not mature enough to make decision about their free time; therefore, their parent should give them some option to use their leisure time. I will take the latter viewpoint, and I do believe that parent should help them help them to use their time efficiently. Nowadays, most children are strongly eager to play video games which lead them to have a sedentary lifestyle, which is not good for their health. For this, parent should require them to do some physical activities in their free time because children are not able to recognize what is wrong and what is right.
To wrap it up, based on the aforementioned reasons, one soon realizes that children should be required to spend their free time to some activities such as doing exercise inasmuch as in the first place it helps them to learn how to exchange their ideas when they are talking with others, as in the second place, they are not mature enough to do what they want.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 459, Rule ID: PHRASE_REPETITION[1]
Message: This phrase is duplicated. You should probably leave only 'help them'.
Suggestion: help them
...nt, and I do believe that parent should help them help them to use their time efficiently. Nowadays...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, furthermore, if, second, so, therefore, well, i feel, such as, as a matter of fact, as a result, in my opinion, to begin with, in the first place, in the second place, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 75.0 43.0788530466 174% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 69.0 52.1666666667 132% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2245.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 490.0 407.700716846 120% => OK
Chars per words: 4.58163265306 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70488508055 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.39945589417 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.422448979592 0.524837075471 80% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 702.9 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 90.0297144335 48.9658058833 184% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.058823529 100.406767564 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.8235294118 20.6045352989 140% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.5294117647 5.45110844103 230% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.412658296775 0.236089414692 175% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.150092780117 0.076458572812 196% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.124511247105 0.0737576698707 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.321911933564 0.150856017488 213% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0593142725381 0.0645574589148 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 11.7677419355 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.98 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.8 10.1575268817 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.88 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.09 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 86.8835125448 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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