Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Children rely too much on the technology, like computers, smart phones, video games for fun and entertainment. Playing simpler toys or playing outside with friends would be better for children’s development.
There are various ways to develop children. While some people consider that children should concentrate on simpler toys or playing outside with friends instead of using several technologies, others do not believe. It is so controvertible for people to determine a specific conclusion. In my view, young people should play the usual toys and hang out with friends outside for their growth. They can gain common sense, attain plenty of friends, and focus on plays without concerns.
To begin with, young people establish common sense by playing outside with friends and uncomplicated toys. People have to hold common sense in bountiful situations of society. This knowledge often gives people opportunities at an early age. For instance, when young people play with friends outside, they have to communicate with others as much as possible. If they do not create conversations with others, they will not be capable of satisfying with pleasure. As a result, children should not rely on some technologies but play with friends and regular toys.
Secondly, playing toys or outside with friends produces children sophisticated development. It is so limited for the progress of children to be educated by parents or teachers. Their friends diverse the possibility of their evolutions. For example, they sometimes obtain the situation to care about their friends about anxieties while playing outside. From this experience, they acquire how to treat humans and stand by their friends. Therefore, their personality will advance more than young people who rely on many technologies.
Finally, children devote on plays without anxieties to play simple toys and with friends outside. They have to remind many operations to exploit the technologies for entertainment. In the television games, they keep in mind how to press bottoms for complete missions. On the other hand, with simple toys and plays outside with friends, they just converge on pleasure because these activities do not include hard rules and principles. Consequently, young people should spend on their time with simple toys and friends outside for their growth.
To sum up, children accelerate their growth more to play with simple toys and friends outside than to devote to technology. I surely believe that they can make common sense for their future, boost their potential of evolution, and focus on plays to avoid complex rules.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, finally, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, for example, for instance, as a result, in my view, to begin with, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 15.1003584229 33% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 73.0 52.1666666667 140% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2021.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 379.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.33245382586 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41224685777 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71615604072 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.498680738786 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 591.3 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.013422923 48.9658058833 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.2083333333 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.7916666667 20.6045352989 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.95833333333 5.45110844103 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.363654044125 0.236089414692 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.12889451489 0.076458572812 169% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0930024751236 0.0737576698707 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.249820841884 0.150856017488 166% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0456046975001 0.0645574589148 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.34 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.13 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.