Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Drivers have to pay a fee for driving in busy city streets when there is a great amount of traffic.
Nowadays it's becoming more important for the government to reduce congestion in big cities, in order to enhance transportation system. Some people believe that government should give the ticket to drivers who are in bumper-to-bumper traffic; however, others argue that it's the duty of the authority to control traffic; in fact, drivers are not the main reason for this problem. It seems to me that, fining drivers is a wrong policy to control heavy traffic. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in this essay.
To begin with, there are some other reasons that cause a big backup. Indeed, traffic is a complex phenomenon and regular drivers are just one creator of this phenomenon. For example, yesterday I was in stop-and-go traffic, it took me 50 minutes to get home when it usually takes only 15 minutes. In fact, the number of drivers was the same as the other days, but this time an accident was the origin of the traffic jam. As the example clarifies, there are some other sources that cause traffic jam like reckless driver and rubberneckers, so it’s not fair all drivers cite in bumper-to-bumper traffic.
Furthermore, it’s duty of the government to control traffic. I mean an individual is taxed for the services he or she receives in society and transportation is one of the services that government should provide. In other words, police can use its traffic camera to gather information and broadcast the traffic data in public media. This information will help persons to bypass the traffic-jam. Additionally, constructing more roads and also increasing the number of lanes will improve transportation. As aforementioned reasons explain, it’s advisable that government improve transportation system instead of just citing drivers, since giving tickets is not a logical solution for the problem of congestion.
To put in a nutshell, although some individuals believe, citing people for attending traffic jam will prevent big backup, I’m of the reason that this resolution is not justice. Because of the driver, in general, is not the main cause of congestion; moreover, the government is responsible for stop-and-go traffic and should invest more in the transportation system. If authority schedule a different time for persons to attend their jobs; for example, students go at 7 a.m. to school and employee go at 8 a.m. to their work, then bumper-to-bumper traffic would less likely to happen. otherwise managing too many drivers at the same time will be challenging.
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Essay evaluation report
government improve transportation system
government improves transportation systems
flaws:
The conclusion is too long and should not put examples in conclusion. This will create duplicated content. Look:
No. of Words: 410 while No. of Different Words: 200
We are expecting:
No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Instead, put one more paragraph and put one very simple conclusion. like this: 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 22 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 410 350
No. of Characters: 2037 1500
No. of Different Words: 200 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.5 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.968 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.914 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 156 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 119 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 60 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 45 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.778 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.438 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.333 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.501 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.08 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 270, Rule ID: IT_IS[17]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...per traffic; however, others argue that its the duty of the authority to control tr...
^^^
Line 7, column 590, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Otherwise
...er traffic would less likely to happen. otherwise managing too many drivers at the same t...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 590, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: otherwise,
...er traffic would less likely to happen. otherwise managing too many drivers at the same t...
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, moreover, so, then, for example, i feel, i mean, in fact, in general, in other words, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.0752688172 235% => Less nominalization wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2120.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 409.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.18337408313 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49708221141 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0322185982 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.515892420538 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 650.7 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.2343237621 48.9658058833 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.578947368 100.406767564 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5263157895 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.15789473684 5.45110844103 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.154223461234 0.236089414692 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0543636068632 0.076458572812 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0270471698847 0.0737576698707 37% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107387757128 0.150856017488 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0252092459969 0.0645574589148 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.76 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.38 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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