Do you agree or disagree with the following statement ?
If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that could be more satisfying.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
For the past few years, unemployment has been one of the most problematic issues for many people. Therefore, in my opinion, to hold that people should refuse to get a secure job to wait for a more satisfying one is an example of irrational thinking. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, getting a secure job is the opportunity that not everyone is fortunate enough to have and it surely helps people earn a living. That is to say, many university graduates are not able to find a job related to their major, some of them are even unemployed. They have to struggle a lot to pay numerous bills since they are already mature and thus, they cannot always rely on their parents when it comes to money. For that reason, they ought to take any chance to have a permanent job to have money for their lives. My brother's experience is a good example for this. When he graduated from university 5 years ago, he was fortunately offered a position in a international company. However, he had to work in the office all the time, which he didn't quite enjoy. That being said, he took my parents' advice to take the job anyway in order to make his first hard-earned money. After 5 years of hard-work, he was able to be promoted and he is having a well-paid job now. If he had wasted his time finding a more satisfying job, he wouldn't have been as successful as he is.
Furthermore, with a secure job, people can afford their hobbies of any kind. To put it another way, with a permanent job, people can pay for their basic needs as well as their leisure activities. Although their jobs may not be fascinating and delightful, they can compensate for it by other activities, which is affordable with their salary. Some people spend their money on vacations, others use it to collect cars to satisfy themselves. As I mentioned above, my brother doesn't enjoy his occupation very much. Despite that, he manages to find pleasure with trips to visit many magnificent places around the world, which he can only afford because of his job.
Owing to all the reasons mentioned above, I truly feel that people shouldn't hesitate taking a secure job. This is because getting a job is the opportunity for one to make ends meet and with a permanent job, people can afford all kinds of leisure.
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Discourse Markers used:
['anyway', 'first', 'furthermore', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'so', 'therefore', 'thus', 'well', 'as for', 'i feel', 'as well as', 'in my opinion', 'to begin with', 'that is to say']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.185501066098 0.229887763892 81% => OK
Verbs: 0.17697228145 0.158761421928 111% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0746268656716 0.0866891130778 86% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0597014925373 0.046263068375 129% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0959488272921 0.0685040099705 140% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.10447761194 0.118717715034 88% => OK
Participles: 0.0319829424307 0.0351676179071 91% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.54616781095 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0533049040512 0.0309702414327 172% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0852878464819 0.0887237588012 96% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0213219616205 0.0209618222197 102% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0127931769723 0.0139019557991 92% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2353.0 2387.08602151 99% => OK
No of words: 420.0 408.028673835 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.60238095238 5.86048508987 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52701905584 4.48200974243 101% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.295238095238 0.338922669872 87% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.192857142857 0.251872472559 77% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.128571428571 0.174417080927 74% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0928571428571 0.112833075102 82% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54616781095 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.519047619048 0.524397521467 99% => OK
Word variations: 58.6055281958 59.2087087015 99% => OK
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6684587814 102% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.5533526081 97% => OK
Sentence length SD: 28.8145214083 48.84282405 59% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.047619048 120.699889404 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 20.5533526081 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.761904761905 0.644075263715 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.54480286738 162% => OK
Readability: 39.2857142857 45.7405998639 86% => OK
Elegance: 0.967948717949 1.45489161554 67% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.388402164908 0.300154397459 129% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.120749177204 0.103427244359 117% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0815653310819 0.0752933317313 108% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.474800987185 0.497263757937 95% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.140734553384 0.151897553556 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.140479258267 0.114077575197 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0793684370894 0.0781384742642 102% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.351650808056 0.336927656856 104% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0467904658352 0.067059652881 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.276514065493 0.210909579961 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0344620528247 0.0618886996521 56% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8870967742 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.86379928315 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.91756272401 81% => OK
Positive topic words: 14.0 8.42114695341 166% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 2.4623655914 81% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.75985663082 72% => OK
Total topic words: 18.0 13.6433691756 132% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.