Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? If you need to discuss upsetting
or controversial problems with others, using email/text messaging is better than using
telephone/voice-messaging.
In today’s convoluted and competitive world, it becomes a highly charged and hot debatable topic whether using text message or voice message is better to discuss controversial topic. Therefore, some people are the leading proponent of the claim that using-voice message is better because it makes everything evident. However, others may take an opposite point of view and believe that in order to become in predicament situation, using text message brings more benefits. If I have to face these to choices, I tend to choose the latter idea. There are some significant reason, the most outstanding of which will be discussed in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, since the inherent of the topic includes sorrow and upsetting situation, text-message should be used to convey information. To elaborate on, during typing, all positive and negative aspect of each sentence will be considered, and therefore, they can transmit the message without the lower level of upsetting which might make to another person more upset. Let me give you an example might make this viewpoint much more evident. Last year, I have applied for a position at Pontoise-Cergy University. Then, at the end of an interview, they told me we will announce the result of the application until next week. one week later, I received an email including your application it was not successful. During reading the email, I gradually understood that why I have not accepted. For this reason, using text message enable both people to keep calm.
Apart from considering the upsetting situation, the second debatable point is that on the one hand, some people believe that using text message increase ambiguity result in a more controversial situation for them. On the other hand, other believe that during the discussion, based on the controversial situation of the topic, using mobile phone gives rise to conflict among them. I take the former viewpoint with a pinch of salt and claim that the latter viewpoint is much closer to the reality, for I do believe that the more people use the test message to send debatable topic, the less they can have a conflict due to the fact that, after reading the message, one can think about the message, and he/she their rage subside progressively. As a result, people can avoid any damage stemming from using the telephone or other voice-based methods.
To wrap it up, by considering all aforementioned reasons, one soon realizes the importance of using text-message which bring more benefits inasmuch as in the first place they can think about all facet of message in order to mitigate the level of upsetting by saying everything step by step and in the second place, any probable conflict would be decreased by using the text-message.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 624, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: One
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, may, second, so, then, therefore, apart from, as a result, to begin with, in the first place, in the second place, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2307.0 1977.66487455 117% => OK
No of words: 454.0 407.700716846 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.08149779736 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61598047577 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79159714377 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.513215859031 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 740.7 618.680645161 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 12.0 4.94265232975 243% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 91.5485602775 48.9658058833 187% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.166666667 100.406767564 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.2222222222 20.6045352989 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.44444444444 5.45110844103 155% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.20035410325 0.236089414692 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0632002677824 0.076458572812 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0475376915798 0.0737576698707 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123674570025 0.150856017488 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0410292402418 0.0645574589148 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 11.7677419355 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.48 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.46 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 86.8835125448 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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