Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Improving schools is the most
important factor in the successful development of a country
In today's convoluted and competitive world, it becomes a highly charged and hot debate topic whether improving schools is the most factor in the thriving of a country or not. Therefore, some people are leading the proponent of the claim that improving schools is cannot guarantee the success of a country because there more important factor compared to it. However, some others may take an opposite point of view and believe that improving the school is really the most significant factor in prosperous of a country. If I have to face these two choices, I tend to choose the latter idea. There are some important reasons, the most outstanding of which will be discussed in the ensuing paragraphs.
To begin with, students are supposed to attend the society in the near future. If they are prepared well and effectively, we will be certain that having a successful country is not far-fetching. To elaborate on, the role of schools in preparing students is really inevitable that by improving schools' facilities, students are allowed to study in a better environment, which is really useful to find their interest and keep trying to fulfill their ambitions. Let me give you an example might make this viewpoint much more evident. Nowadays, most of the jobs in each country related to technology such as computers, if students are trained enough at school to use computers, they will not have any difficulties in finding a decent job resulting in prospering a country. For this reason, by providing better facilities for students, not only they can chase their dreams, but also they are prepared well for their future lives.
Apart from good preparation, nowadays, in order to become more successful in working environment, co-workers should have an ability to interact in tandem, which their productivity is increased. Hence, the more employees have a high performance, the more they society will be successful to reach their goals. Hence, schools are able to provide an opportunity for students to boost interpersonal skills in them. To going to depth, by adding sports clubs, social communities, students can make friends with other students, what is better, they can share their idea with others peers. By doing so, they can cultivate new friendship, which enables them to learn how to interact with others. For this reasons, by boosting interpersonal skills, they will be able to have a better relationship with others in working area, where ensures the success of each society,
To wrap it up, by considering all aforementioned reasons, one soon realizes the positive importance of improving schools in country successful inasmuch as in the first place, they can prepared themselves better for their future lives, as in the second place, their interpersonal skill will be boosted to enable them to increase their productivity in working area
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 691, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
... learn how to interact with others. For this reasons, by boosting interpersonal skil...
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Line 9, column 185, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'prepare'
Suggestion: prepare
...nasmuch as in the first place, they can prepared themselves better for their future live...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, may, really, second, so, therefore, well, apart from, such as, to begin with, in the first place, in the second place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 71.0 52.1666666667 136% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2394.0 1977.66487455 121% => OK
No of words: 466.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13733905579 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64618479453 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82214542148 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 237.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.508583690987 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 734.4 618.680645161 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 12.0 4.94265232975 243% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 107.355342439 48.9658058833 219% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 140.823529412 100.406767564 140% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.4117647059 20.6045352989 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.11764705882 5.45110844103 167% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.17831140644 0.236089414692 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0623956903595 0.076458572812 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0494427210183 0.0737576698707 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.11747656092 0.150856017488 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0403010419804 0.0645574589148 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.5 11.7677419355 140% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 58.1214874552 76% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.83 10.9000537634 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.67 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 86.8835125448 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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