Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In today’s modern life, individuals are bombarded with the news related to the different events all around the world, presented by social media and television. Some people believe that, although knowing about them may not has a direct impact on individuals’ daily program, it is necessary to be familiar with them. While others hold the contrast idea. Personally, it is my firm conviction that people should be aware of them, regardless of whether they affect their life or not.
To begin with, from my point of view, knowing about different events occurred around the world plays a vital role in individuals lives, even if their daily routines are not directly affected by the news. To be more specific, knowing about different issues related to different countries broaden individuals’ horizon and helps them to see a subject from a different perspective. Consequently, they will be able to solve their future problems appropriately. As an illustration, last year I watched a documentary related to the earthquake disaster and the way Italians perform to control the damage of structures due to the seismic forces. Generally, it did not any influence on my life but helped me to think about innovative ways to design structures appropriately to keep safe during the earthquake.
Furthermore, being familiar with the news all around the world provides people to increase their knowledge in a host of subjects. As a consequence, they will be able to have enough information to talk about in a group. To put it in another way, the more individuals know about the events occur in the world, the more they will have up-to-minute data to present. An example can drive this notion to home. A friend of mine, who is interested to read about the events of different countries through the Internet, has an extraordinary talent to talk about a variety of subjects in a cluster.
To sum up, from my perspective, having information about the events of different countries, not only do increase peoples’ awareness and give them a golden opportunity to think differently, but also further their knowledge in different issues to be able to talk about.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 326, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... is necessary to be familiar with them. While others hold the contrast idea. Personal...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, furthermore, if, may, so, while, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.0286738351 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 71.0 52.1666666667 136% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1808.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 355.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.09295774648 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34067318298 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05500717439 2.67179642975 114% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.543661971831 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 569.7 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.669230715 48.9658058833 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.533333333 100.406767564 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.6666666667 20.6045352989 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.46666666667 5.45110844103 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.197112690897 0.236089414692 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0722515766245 0.076458572812 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0492888559227 0.0737576698707 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.129753314392 0.150856017488 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0403017079798 0.0645574589148 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.54 10.9000537634 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.69 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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