Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In our modern era, we have encountered several difficulties that have arisen from unawareness. Many people have the perspective that knowing anything that happens around the world is a wise approach among businessmen and able them to determine the best way of their jobs, yet others have the opposite view that it squanders time and energy to know worldwide events. I personally hold the first view and think it is a necessity for all the members of our world. I will expand on my notions in the following paragraphs.
The first opinion I claim is that in our hectic life in which we have not enough time for each other as well as for ourselves and also because most of the people have nine-to-five jobs, it is good for us to know new things that happened around the world for socializing and make new friends. For example imagine that you are on the way to your work and you are alone, if you know some appealing news, you will be able to make a small talk with the one that sits beside you and maybe it causes a friendship between you two, In addition at work you have topics to talk about at your launch time. Therefore it is not too bad to know worldwide news; at least it will help us to break our loneliness.
The second claim that I assert is that some businesses need to know all of the events that already happening around the world, they will use this knowledge to improving their works and also promote their incomes. Statics shows that those businesses which are up to date and always follow all of the world’s occurrences are more successful in their business and are lucrative, but those which do not pay attention to worldwide news are not as successful as the previous groups. So this policy is the most important approach to have a flourishing business.in addition, I believe that it contributes to every individual of society to achieve their goals because we can learn from some events so we will be able to take the right decision in arduous situations.
To make a long story short, in our busy mundane lives interpersonal interaction is the most important thing for our mental health, by knowing a bulk amount of news about all around the world we can make friends and also connect with other members of our society. Besides this news helps us to be successful in our jobs, earn more money and expansion our business.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, if, may, second, so, therefore, well, as for, at least, for example, in addition, you know, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 65.0 43.0788530466 151% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1925.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 421.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.57244655582 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52971130743 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51269815798 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.489311163895 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 606.6 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 35.0 20.1344086022 174% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 91.5367260842 48.9658058833 187% => OK
Chars per sentence: 160.416666667 100.406767564 160% => OK
Words per sentence: 35.0833333333 20.6045352989 170% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.75 5.45110844103 197% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.205277482409 0.236089414692 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0710340879741 0.076458572812 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0563919347735 0.0737576698707 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.118104040316 0.150856017488 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0454729360166 0.0645574589148 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.6 11.7677419355 150% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.87 58.1214874552 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 10.1575268817 144% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.82 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.04 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.0 10.0537634409 159% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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