Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
All of the people should have two main purpose of working: making money and developing their country. Personally I prefer to working five days a week instead of three days. The reasons for my choice are manifold, among which tired or sickness and efficiency and productivity are the most paramount ones.
First, working hard for long hours can be very harmful. It make anybody very tired. In this way the worker cannot do anything more in the other of day. Also because of the tired, it can cause sick. When the body is tired, it is going to be weak and adequate for the illnesses. As an example, two years ago I was worked as a company manager. In four days we had a lot of work to do and we force everybody should work as long shift. After these days I get a bad sick that make me not going to work for a week. For these reasons, I believe that working for long hour can have a bad effect to health of workers.
Additionally, if a company do not has productivity after a time it will go to broke and the workers would deport from the factory. So the productivity is a important problem for the labors and employees and company. I beieve that working for long time can reduce efficiency and productivity. As a personal experiences, I worked at electronic company as a quality manager. One part of the company was assembling. I studied for this part about the productivity. I found one of the important parameter that influence the efficiency and productivity is time of the work. At the beginning of morning the productivity was very good but whatever time passed it reduced. It was the minimum number one hour before finishing time working. On the whole, I think it cannot have a good effect on the efficiency and productivity.
As a conclusion, personally I believe that working for shorter hours in a day is better than working for long hours for the two main reasons that I said.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, so, i think, on the whole
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 52.1666666667 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1545.0 1977.66487455 78% => OK
No of words: 343.0 407.700716846 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.50437317784 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30351707066 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68115709873 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 212.727598566 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.483965014577 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 504.0 618.680645161 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.7871465918 48.9658058833 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 67.1739130435 100.406767564 67% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.9130434783 20.6045352989 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.04347826087 5.45110844103 37% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.286777719931 0.236089414692 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0830275436855 0.076458572812 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0803588366014 0.0737576698707 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.206324344036 0.150856017488 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0795375399796 0.0645574589148 123% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.2 11.7677419355 61% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 58.1214874552 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.23 10.9000537634 76% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.82 8.01818996416 85% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 86.8835125448 62% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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