Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
We live in technology era and we are force to work hard to earn money for providing our needs. There are recent debates over whether working for three days a week is more enjoyable or working five days a week. Different people hold various opinions due to their distinct backgrounds and perspectives. Some people may hold the opinion that we could work three days a week in a compressed way so we would have four days that it is long enough for going vacations but other have a negative attitude. As a matter of fact, this issue is so complicated and controversial that it is difficult to find a universal answer to this question. Nevertheless, I endorse that, to some extent I am agreed with the opinion that working five days a week would provide us some benefits that we could enjoy life. In order to substantiate my vantage points, I would like to address some key evidences; not working intensely in a week is better for keeping our health, and also; it is better for the company we work for.
One of the reasons coming to my mind at first has to do with the fact that working for three days a week instead of five days, would have destructive effects on our health. But when we work five days a week, in each day we have enough time to sleep and other activities such as having breakfast, talking with our children and our spouse, taking shower and so forth. Thus, we are not have to deal with problems like lacking of sleep and messing up the order of our daily schedule. To illustrate this idea let’s consider fallowing example. My roommate Julia works for a company and at first she wanted to work three days a week so in each her work day she woke up five in the morning and worked until ten pm and after that she came home when she was really exhausted. Most of the times she could not prepare a meal or go restaurant to eat dinner and also she had to go to bed early. After a while, she got really ill.
Along with the same line, another privilege of the aforementioned idea; if we work five days a week for a company, we would be motivated to work for it and it is better for this company. When individual in a company are happy and could their work gradually, they would work more efficiently and their company reaches its goals. We live in a technology era and if people do works well, as a result, both companies that people work in are dominant in a society and this company promotes the rank of individuals who works well. Thereby, individual are enthusiastic to work better.
To put the issue into the perspective, by taking into account these entire aspects, working for five days a week is more enjoyable that both individuals are healthy and have more energy to work and also companies which people work for are successful to reach their targets.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 372, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a compressed way" with adverb for "compressed"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...on that we could work three days a week in a compressed way so we would have four days that it is l...
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Line 2, column 384, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'had'.
Suggestion: had
...g shower and so forth. Thus, we are not have to deal with problems like lacking of s...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, nevertheless, really, so, thus, well, while, as to, such as, as a matter of fact, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 60.0 43.0788530466 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2269.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 510.0 407.700716846 125% => OK
Chars per words: 4.44901960784 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75217629947 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47783639545 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.456862745098 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 718.2 618.680645161 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 62.0918361935 48.9658058833 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.421052632 100.406767564 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.8421052632 20.6045352989 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.31578947368 5.45110844103 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.335769668574 0.236089414692 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.123552682707 0.076458572812 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.106149104974 0.0737576698707 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.243026254163 0.150856017488 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0362773983794 0.0645574589148 56% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.01 58.1214874552 107% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.83 10.9000537634 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.62 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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