Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours. Use specific reasons and examples to suppo

Working hours in a week is a controversial matter among both workers and employers. Some people say it is hilarious to have long working hours with fewer working days, while others prefer normal working hours that spread in the whole week. I believe that long working hours would cause several problems. Long working hours reduce working performance and may risk the workers' health. Additionally, long working hours impose more pressure on employees to do the same amount of job they use to do in a week.

Working for consecutive hours will reduce brain performance and hence cause employees to be less productive. Several experiments conducted by researcher bolster the idea that our brain has a performance curve. This curve indicates that our performance decay after some hours and our body needs to rest in order to restore itself. As an evident example, consider a simple computer programmer who has worked even for four consecutive hours, she or he can not concentrate on coding because of exhaustion and produce codes which have a high error rate. Another good example is those who work with dangerous equipment like welders in high altitude who need constant attention to do their job. So, long working hours can reduce performance or even risk employees lives.

The workers are already under pressure to do more duties in their working hours. Although they have more off days, it does not mean they have to do less. For example, architecture should be awake for several hours to make ready the plans on time. Or drivers who are working in the transportation industry. They should reach their destination faster in three days a week working and cannot sleep because of this.

Although reducing working days allow employees to have time for their personal projects and spend more time with their family, a long working hour will reduce performance and might have dangerous health side effect which outweighs its benefits.

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Average: 7 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 368, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'workers'' or 'worker's'?
Suggestion: workers'; worker's
...ce working performance and may risk the workers health. Additionally, long working hour...
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Line 1, column 485, Rule ID: USE_TO_VERB[1]
Message: Did you mean 'used'?
Suggestion: used
...oyees to do the same amount of job they use to do in a week. Working for consecu...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
hence, may, so, while, for example

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 52.1666666667 65% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1618.0 1977.66487455 82% => OK
No of words: 320.0 407.700716846 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05625 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22948505376 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55556225467 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 212.727598566 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.540625 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 491.4 618.680645161 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.94265232975 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.4273090181 48.9658058833 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.1764705882 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8235294118 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.0 5.45110844103 37% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.324753986644 0.236089414692 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.115652328396 0.076458572812 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0604901626327 0.0737576698707 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.217272601768 0.150856017488 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0540193107729 0.0645574589148 84% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.59 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 86.8835125448 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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