Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours. Use spec
As humans living in a civilized society, we are all eager to know how to use our time more efficiently. Whether or not working hours have something to do with our satisfaction of our lives has always been a controversial issue among many people. Although some psychologists argue as if it is a general truth that working more frequently in a week with shorter amount of time needed to work each day is better than working in less numbers of days with longer amount of working hours each day, I strongly contend that the latter is a more logical choice. Among countless reasons and examples which can vindicate my point of view, I'll pinpoint the two most conspicuous ones through following paragraphs.
The first thing that juts out of mind easily at the first moment of thinking about this subject is the fact that by taking people's hectic lives into account, anyone can come to the idea that people need more vacation time in order to be disposed of all the stresses and obstacles which accompany with new ways of life. A twenty first-century person experiences being stocked in several traffic jams which can be really irritating, and the less the exposure to hectic life, the more being pacified and calm the person. An example can illuminate this claim to some extent. There was a problem with all the workers of Microsoft Company in 2003. They were really high-tempered and were not able to control their anger and treated their costumers in a really annoying manner. The founder of this company, Bill Gates, decided to reduce their working days from five days a week to three days. After a month or two, all the costumers leaved this company while they were really satisfied with the way the employees treated them.
The second thing that is worth bearing in mind is the fact that, this will diminish the unemployment critic all over the world. It goes without saying that a given company or office needs to provide its consumers with every day support. Consequently, it should hire many employees who are active and fresh enough to work efficiently during their working hours because they have gotten plenty of rest during their off days. A noteworthy refreshingly intelligible statistics, which was gathered from a research conducted on all the mineral water producing factories in Australia, revealed that from the spot that their working policy changed from working five days of short hours of working to three days of long hours, they observed many remarkable changes in several aspects. Not only did their employees' efficiency increase by twenty seven percent, but also the unemployment critic of Australia decreased by about five and a half percent.
To make a long story short, based on the aforementioned arguments, there are many reasons which can be persuasive enough for people in order to understand that the benefits of working three days of long hours outweigh the advantages of working five days of short hours. Some reasons are mentioned above such as its ability to heighten the workers' efficiency, preventing them from being stressful and its ability of decreasing the amount of unemployment in a given society. But that was just a story in a nut shell. Obviously, there are many other reasons and examples, challenging the claim, which are not mentioned. All in all, employers should consider these issues thoroughly while deciding about their working polocies.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Whether
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Suggestion: fewer
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, if, really, second, so, while, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 85.0 52.1666666667 163% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2823.0 1977.66487455 143% => OK
No of words: 570.0 407.700716846 140% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.95263157895 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.88617158649 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59718162941 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 294.0 212.727598566 138% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.515789473684 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 859.5 618.680645161 139% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 84.6925077069 48.9658058833 173% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.428571429 100.406767564 134% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.1428571429 20.6045352989 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.33333333333 5.45110844103 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.23513430351 0.236089414692 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0613889404778 0.076458572812 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.077645835122 0.0737576698707 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.151737705585 0.150856017488 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0591604361355 0.0645574589148 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 11.7677419355 132% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 10.1575268817 124% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.73 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.55 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 129.0 86.8835125448 148% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 10.002688172 185% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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