Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Most advertisements make products seem much better than they really are.
In today's progressive world, no one can turn a blind eye to the significant effects of advertisements in people's life. Some people argues that the most advertisements make products seem much better than they really are. On the other extreme of the rope, others hold the opposite opinion. Although both sides take their own positions, personally speaking, I firmly believe that the first group carries more weight. In the following paragraph, I will explain my reasons to justify my points of view.
As the first and paramount reason, most of advertisements have innovative ideias and concepts. However, some products do not have good quality. Hence, these ideas and goods do not achieve people objectives. In other words, advertisements shows the service or products much better than they are. Take my own experience as a example. When I was a child, I used to watch advertisements on television. Consequently, I usually asked for my parents to buy a new toy. But, some toys in real life were very boring. As a result, after a few years I understand that the advertisements make products have more benefits and advantages than they really have.
The second reason coming to my mind to substantiate my point of view is that, advertisements are made to people buy some products or services. Moreover, people can be mad after them acquired a good. To be more specific, people can feel deceived by some faulty advertisements. For instance, an experimental research conducted by some psychology students shows that people who always buy something have more chance to developed mental disease, such as depression. Furthermore, the research points out that people who always are watching advertisements have more stress and worries in their life.
In conclusion, take the above reason into account, I strongly believe that most advertisements make goods or services much attractive than they are, because it not only provides for people products with bad quality, but also might generate a bad mental health for the person who is watching.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 36, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the advertisements') or simply say ''most advertisements''.
Suggestion: most of the advertisements; most advertisements
.... As the first and paramount reason, most of advertisements have innovative ideias and concepts. Ho...
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Line 3, column 322, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...han they are. Take my own experience as a example. When I was a child, I used to ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, moreover, really, second, so, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as a result, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 52.1666666667 61% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1711.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 333.0 407.700716846 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.13813813814 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27180144563 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97382218587 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.564564564565 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 535.5 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 57.8536947826 48.9658058833 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.55 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.65 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 5.45110844103 147% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 11.8709677419 34% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.258842072026 0.236089414692 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0806641979116 0.076458572812 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.12122948603 0.0737576698707 164% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.175799040048 0.150856017488 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0858954523142 0.0645574589148 133% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.24 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.89 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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